Watercolors

Watercolors

A Poem by Dani California

 

  

Watercolors

Run carelessly off of your canvas

Onto the floor

Creating a slippery surface

Where others may fall.

 

Blind

To what lies beneath their feet

Following only your words

Through an array of tainted colors

To the pictures you’ve painted.

 

Victim

Is the signature you’ve scribbled

Depicted on all of your paintings

Though each held a different portrait

The same final outcome is displayed.

 

Deceit

Is what hangs in your gallery

Your fans huddled around in denial

Seemingly oblivious to the similarities

The same strokes, repeated. 

 

Liar 

Is what you’ve named them

Throwing spilled paint over truth

Leaving others to soil their shoes

In the mess you’ve created.

 

 

 

 

© 2010 Dani California


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I like this and I like the way you've used colors to express the idea of a painting. The poem itself is painfully true of someone I know, but far better worded than I could have done! I think I like this stanza best, although the whole poem resonates deeply.

Victim
Is the signature you've scribbled
Depicted on all of your paintings
Though each held a different portrait
The same final outcome is displayed.

Great job, as usual!


Posted 12 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.




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Oh I like this! I love the metaphors. Your use of colors and titles in each stanza gave the whole piece even more strength. You've introduced a very different perspective which makes this an interesting read. Going in my faves.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Really great job! I liked how you explained everything through the colors, and whats happening while creating that painting... Great job, like always.

Liar

Is what you've named them

Throwing spilled paint over truth

Leaving others to soil their shoes

In the mess you've created.


My favourite verse.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is a pretty awesome poem, I really enjoyed reading it.
I love how you've shown a terrific metaphor between
a person; a liar and art. Sometimes art is just what
we want the truth to be, anyway. We're not always able to
face the truth, or able to hide the lies. Great job, again! :D

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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WOW This is fantastic, i was expecting, by the title, a fluffy pretty poem full of colours and love, and boy was i wrong. I love the last stanza, but the whole thing was pretty amazing

Kudos to you

Emma

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

You paint such an accurate image of betrayal with the skill of a master writer. The color presentation is a perfect touch. Why so many choose to live their lives this way will always baffle me. They put so much effort into negativity that if they used the same amount of effort into doing something kind, the world would be better off for it. Every line is so skillfully done and with much admiration i give to you many kudos my friend.

Mr. Lopez

Posted 12 Years Ago


I like the use of color with the words that paint the drama of this piece. The color gives a softness to the calling out you are giving this person.... interesting words that seem to say maybe enough drama - enough of this feeling sorry for yourself and maybe even why should I any more?

Kath

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Such a strong piece, i love the words in the beginning, the words you chose were perfect to the description.
It's really nice. Liar

Is what you've named them

Throwing spilled paint over truth

Leaving others to soil their shoes

In the mess you've created.
I love these lines. It's really great. :)
So powerful and strong.
Keep it up. :)




Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

fabulous use of metaphor. The colors used to paint the picture of our words. I know many have tried to write on this concept. but you pulled it together magnifcently.

Its an orginal pieace! well done.
I love the depth, and truth to them.

well done poet!

much love n respect

-Lalli

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The title intrigued me and i loved the font colors you used....i was expecting a happy cozy write and this was completely unexpected....almost remorseful and bitter....i will have to read it again sometime.lea

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I am so very intrigued by this Dani. I wonder who this portrays. Is it the author being painfully honest or is this written for someone else? Someone still practicing self deceit ?

Technically, the first stanza sets the theme the balance of the poem continues to uncover. Truly great observations laid out in irony and plain truth. Well done Dani.


Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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