A Poem by Deandra Dawn


They surrendered in fevered desperation.
 The common traits of heroism lost on their vulgar display of so called courage
Defeated by their grotesque, undetermined quest,
leaving behind a small sentiment of sober indignation
the splendid spoils of an articulate battle
fought without reason
left behind as dust
they are left jaded
an odd ending to a terrifying beginning

© 2012 Deandra Dawn

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Very good. Like the use of words, it's sentences and how strong the poem is.

Posted 11 Years Ago

I see a group of Union soldiers destroying a large plantation in George, a group of rowdy angry, stinking, sweating soldiers that was part of Sherman's Fire Snake splitting a Rebel Army to the Atlantic.

So called men of honer, a house, nothing but women and a few tired old slaves, hoping for liberation. Witnessing Cruelty, barbarism, all with faded blue uniforms.

Brilliant work to spark a vision, and this was only one, think of the countless images your work inspired.


Posted 12 Years Ago

The frightning thing is that this poem speaks the truth as well as written out without flaws. You've described how to best things can combined life and death. The way you word the sentences was a delight for me to read.

Posted 12 Years Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like the strength and description in your words. Heroism and fear can walk hand in hand. Sometime desperation men do great thing or terrible things too. Great thoughts create by the excellent poem.

Posted 12 Years Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


Posted 12 Years Ago

This is so true... This is exactly what life is... this poem is divine. "The grotesque, undetermined quest" is the meaning of life. The battle fought without reason... that's living. until we are "left behind as dust", or until we die. I love how you say so much with so little. Impressive.

Posted 12 Years Ago

An odd ending to a terrifying beginning? Love that. It reminds me of the song can't stand me now by the libertines, only in reverse. You certainly have a knack for the use of language. Your words are always so thought provoking

Posted 12 Years Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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Added on April 20, 2012
Last Updated on April 20, 2012
Tags: surrender, heroism, deandra dawn, courage, battle


Deandra Dawn
Deandra Dawn

Orlando, FL

My name is Deandra Dawn and I have been writing for as long as I can remember. I also go by the name, Ravishing Raven, and I am currently reworking my website. What else is there to know when there .. more..


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