Life's Book

Life's Book

A Poem by AcasualPawn

Human life rules set by someone.
Of which birth & death,two important occasions.

These two important occasions,
Generally, humans are devoid of taking decisions.

But, phase between these two important occasions
are filled with choices, splendor and ambitions.

Its like crackers of different exhibition,
Some will burn splendidly
illuminating the whole sky,
Some will burn silently
why????????? sigh,
Some will dead before they burn
not even getting chance to try,
But in the end they are all ,
pray of darkness devouring vision.

So what is the use of this cracker phase
In the rule book.
Is it because birth and death hung by its hook.

Yes, cracker phase is an opportunity
Which decides birth's moments prosperity,
And death's moments cruelty........

© 2017 AcasualPawn


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Amazingly penned! No one has control over death and birth but time in between this two stage is controlled by us. We can mould our life according to our wish and skills. But I have some doubt. Do we really control our lives, or it's just an illusion created by the same someone who created us.

Posted 3 Years Ago


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AcasualPawn

3 Years Ago

Well had gone through humans or puppets & justice of god ...
So you sure know my answerread more



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Indeed, we have no choice about our entries and exits, but many choices exist between those boundaries. Unfortunately, many take no note of them.

Posted 2 Years Ago


(applauds) Absolutely amazing and mind blowing truths here, mate. :D Fantastic!!!!

Posted 3 Years Ago


This one for some reason is my absolute favorite. I love it. Keep it up

Posted 3 Years Ago


Nice one. These lines teach soo much about about life. Teaches everything that a person who wants to achieve should know .

Posted 3 Years Ago


AcasualPawn

3 Years Ago

Thankyou Ayshwarya for your kind words
You're trying to be deep and generic at the same time.

• Human life’s rule set by someone

No clue of what you mean, and your intent doesn't make it to the page. You say "rule," as if there is only one, and then allude to it being "set" by a generic "someone." I'm sure you had a meaning in your mind for it, but the reader has only what the words suggest to them, based on their background, not yours.

Why not make them see your vision by involving them?

• Of which birth & death,two important occasions.

Why tell the reader what they already know? It's like saying, "Mashed potatoes have no bones." It's true, but so what?

• Humans are devoid of taking decisions.

For being born, perhaps. But many make decisions about death and its manner. Some, for example, take their life. So the line doesn't work.

Mostly, you talk in generalities, you spend six lines telling the reader the ways crackers can burn. Why not twelve, or three? Why not say, "All crackers burn differently, and be done with it? Does the reader, who will never burn a cracker, really become electrified to be told that crackers don't all burn the same way? That applies to pretty much everything, after all, so you're not telling the reader something they don't already know.

You're talking to the reader, but not involving them. And it's the involvement that entertains.




Posted 3 Years Ago


AcasualPawn

3 Years Ago

Well many mistakes are corrected.
And I used crackers in three ways splendidly silently and d.. read more
JayG

3 Years Ago

• And I used crackers in three ways splendidly silently and dead before they burn ..basically depi.. read more
AcasualPawn

3 Years Ago

Thankyou sir,,, i will try to correct maximum problems
this was very well written! i love these lines -
"Yes, cracker phase is an opportunity
Which decides birth's moments prosperity,
And death's moments cruelty.......

great read!

Posted 3 Years Ago


AcasualPawn

3 Years Ago

Thankyou darkmiSt
Very well phrased. Enjoyable to read as well, as life and death are a constant on everyone's mind.

Posted 3 Years Ago


AcasualPawn

3 Years Ago

Thankyou athena for your ki d words
AcasualPawn

3 Years Ago

*ki d=kind
Great phrasing! I wish I could poem like you! ;)

Posted 3 Years Ago


AcasualPawn

3 Years Ago

Well, thats the quite honor elliot..
Beautifully phrased!!!!!!

Posted 3 Years Ago


AcasualPawn

3 Years Ago

Now she is preparing for neet see, so ethical
Jiya

3 Years Ago

My only advice to you would be to search for happiness
AcasualPawn

3 Years Ago

Appreciated with heart.....

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