Rusted World

Dream of a blind kid comes true, but there is more to it.....

Darkness my phobia,
empty' isolated' dumb' rejected.
Sole possession of me,
my only buddy.

morning arises in darkness
night ceases in darkness..

My fantasy' dream' desire
to appraise & admire,
heavenly world entire.

May be god becomes kind,
with a letter i got donated eyes

But first thing i saw with my eyes,
are few words of advise.

THIS WORLD
IS SO CRUEL
AND I DON'T WANNA
SEE IT ANY MORE

Reviews

[Elizabeth]

Whoa.. The last stanza was rather chilling... It puts a darker twist in this already dark poem(no pun intended)
A very powerful poem indeed

[Sami Khalil]

You how us the reality of this world and its many ills or injustices toward others. Some powerful lines and a good ending.

[Priyanshi]

morning arises in darkness
night ceases in darkness..
I found these lines stronger in your poem and even loved them.and the last lines along with the whole poem is superb.
well written, my friend.

[MoonChild]

A beautiful start and a tragic end, loved the flow of this and the twist at the end.

[Richard Layne]

I like turn at the end. THERE are a lot of terrible things to see. Unfortunately, not seeing them doesn't make them go away. I like your point though--tragic

[AcasualPawn]

Thank you for your time fellow writer...

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Yes this world have so many cruel sides indeed. But there is also so many light sides. We should catch our inner and spread all over in whole universe. Very vivid imaginery in your words.

[Tazeen Ahmed]

I like the idea and theme of this poem. It is influential as well as emotional.
A blind cannot see the beautiful world with his eyes. Yet ironically a vietnamese poet during Vietnam war said that I'll be rather blind than witness the oppression(of colonialism).
Well done!

[AcasualPawn]

Thanks for understanding Tazeen

[Great Aunt Astri]

Your poem makes a big impact! But I suppose seeing the world as cruel, may be better than seeing it through rose tinted glasses. Or, even, better than only seeing what you want to see! But, as the young blind boy said, 'My fantasy dream desire to appraise and admire heavenly world entire', so we can all dream on.
I look forward to reading more of your poems.

[AcasualPawn]

Yes we can dream on it doesn't cost a penny..

[Pragati Chaudhary]

I liked the name "Casual Pig" :D

AND ofcourse World is like that only :)
as always
well, I found an Indian atleast!

[AcasualPawn]

Well there are mostly indians here,,,.. With different name...... And well casual pig can be of many type like one above your almirah glaring you constantly.......... Well its pig** b***k

[DIVYA]

Written with much cynicism and sadness. I am sure the kid will have many beautiful things to appreciate too...A great poem, a great concept.

[AcasualPawn]

Sure kid will have many beautiful things to appreciate too. World differs according to opinions.kid had anticipation towards world. While donor have nothing more, that interested him,connected him to the world....

But kid sure will have hell of difficulty when he will face contrasting expressions with words of people...

Thankyou for your comment Divya..

[DIVYA]

You are welcome