Nightmare

some scary dreams feels like real.

In this darkness, I'm drowning

I struggled for my breath,

But still I'm dying

I panic because  it’s a painful death

 

I woke up from that nightmare

And all I can do is to hug teddy

It feels awkward, feels like someone is there

Watching at me seriously

 

I turned on the lights

And I tried to go back to sleep

But in my heart, there's a fright

That I may drown again so deep

 

Author's Note

I made this poem because nightmares won't stop visiting me..........T^T
please ignore the grammar problems....all I want is your honest opinion..... ^^,

Reviews

[joshua deathdealer]

I like the honesty and flow of this write. Well done.

[李[A]]

There's not much of a grammar issue; Poetically speaking there aren't too many rules you're entitled to follow. Nonetheless, It conveyed such a deep meaning in such a few stanzas. Kudos to you!

[Jena]

Wow, great!

[Thea]

Go, lola... :)))

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Conveyed your feelings of nightmare so well :)

[Jeremy Baker]

Writing our fears is a way of takling ownership and control of them - good work.

[zoeeyx]

This is perfect; keep writing.