suicide?

there's a lot of people who thinks suicide is the best solution to their problems

Nothing’s there, I’m all alone

There’s no one I can rely on except my own

I thought I got a lot of friends

But no one stays with me until the end

 

Pressure, mistakes and lies pushed me to the edge

In fear I’m shaking, in sweat I am drenched

I slipped, I tried to stay up

But I lost all my hopes and gave up

 

They just watched me as I fall and shatter

But no one care because it doesn’t matter

Memories of the past turned into my nightmares

I’m always out of place, I don’t belong anywhere

 

Everything that I have is gone

I gave my best to all the things that I’ve done

But they always prove me wrong

I knew I was a failure all along

 

With this blade, It has been decided where all it ends

I don’t want to live like this, I just want to fade away instead

I don’t want to see my cruel fate

I just want to lose all this pain that I hate

 

Red velvet fluid slowly started to drip

From the wrist on which I reaped

Drowned in the water where it flows like rose petals

Blood shines at the tip of metal

 

Author's Note

Please ignore the grammar problems......

Reviews

[SuicidePact.]

:O soo relatable, this was well written loved how you did the First letter of every paragraph.

So many emotions running through me as I read this, so many flash backs.

[Bella Fleur]

Gosh, I hope you don't really feel this way and that this is strictly creative. I used to write dark poetry when I was your age, so I can relate. And, assuming that you don't really want to harm yourself, my favourite line is "Red velvet fluid slowly started to drip". I imagine thick, dark blood blossoming out of pale skin. Nicely written!

[Draven]

This is awsome. I can relate to this. I think of suicide every day. Nice write.

[kathrina]

I feel the emotions with this poem. I can relate to it.

Excellent work. :)

[xxxNothingLikeGothxxx]

I love it! I should spread this, A LOT!

[Searching 4 Serenity]

No grammar problems here. Maybe a little rewording.
Raw emotions=poetry
But why result to self-inflicted bloodshed???

really good

[Thea]

Poignant... :)))
Great poem...

[SinnerInspired]

nicely expressed
You shoulda called it red velvet fluid though but it was stil great

[Carrion.]

spelling errors.
filled with sorrow,
it seems like the silence is screaming when I read that last line.
good job..