First

First

A Poem by Desmund Tiny
"

he's not my first man but he's my first love

"

You were not my first date

You were not my first kiss

You were not the first one who had me
You were not the first man

 

But...

 

You were the first who made me desperate

You were the first who brought me the bliss

You were the first who made me fall on my knees

You were the first man

 

 

You’re my First love

Though probably you don’t know it

 

 

© 2011 Desmund Tiny


Author's Note

Desmund Tiny
first love...chuchu... honest opinion

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this was really sweet ..
i loved most of your writing well done :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


Nobody will forget everything that happened first in our lives especially love things. Your expressions in this poem is excellent. I enjoyed the whole selection. I am sorry if I haven't reviewed your previews read requests (if ever you sent), I was busy the past months. Keep writing, Desmund.

...Layla...

Posted 12 Years Ago


Awwww... so cute. Love it!! =)
First loves really are something we never forget. ^-^

Such a lovely poem. You made me think of my first love.. lol. Great write!

Posted 12 Years Ago


This is so sweet...xx

Posted 12 Years Ago


A poem many can relate to I'm sure. You did a good job it was sweet

Posted 12 Years Ago


Thats really cute.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Lovely (:

Posted 12 Years Ago


interesting written. I like the construction, definitely enhance the whole feeling.
Good written as well.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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tk
aww..
that's a very creative and unique way of writing what your heart says.. :) i agree with you very much, first love always remains... ^_^

"You were the first who made me desperate" --> relate much?? XD

Posted 12 Years Ago


Very true and wise poetry written here...
first and best are sometimes the same but most of the time, real love
is rare and can happen any time...

Excellent format and style :)

Posted 12 Years Ago



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I just want the name "Desmund Tiny" because it is one of my favorite character in the Novel "Darren Shan" but you can call me Des. ^^, errr.. Hello to my old writings!~ wew it's been years I gues.. more..

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