The pain of my life

   The pain goes through my body till I cry

 Why is it that I'm so wrong

      The constant lectures are so annoying

 Sometimes I just wish I would die

 I'm sick of hearing that I'm a Nuisance

    Music only makes my soul darker

Stories helped for awhile, but make me sad

   My life just seems to be getting more translucent

It's always something with me

   Either I'm too loud, or forgetful

 But it only makes things worse to talk back

But one of these days they'll see

 

Author's Note

Another bad day :'(

Reviews

[Trenton Colburn]

This is so relatable, it is how i feel all the time when i am feel forced to plaster a smile on my face. all of your writing is utterly amazing but this piece put words to these emotions that are hard to describe accurately. saying you don't feel good enough doesn't cover it, but at least you can let your readers know and at the very least sympathize. i really enjoyed this poem!

[Oswald Chesterfield Cobblepot]

Thank you so much :) I'm so glad you liked it. It just feel so good to get all of it out you know.

[Bluefire]

Can I trade a heart that's been chewed up by a fire demon for that one?
I'll clean off the burnt charred pieces if you want.
My parents bother me too. My mom's very controlling and my dad is.. Well, not a real dad.
But it'll get better, you'll see. I know it will because I've seen it. ^^

[Oswald Chesterfield Cobblepot]

Thank you so much baby, but having you in my life changes everything ^*^

[Debbie_Philly]

Dont hold on to the negative in your life.... tune out the negative.... hold on the fact that you have allot of talent and dont let anyone steal your light.... great piece ... hope it gets better .

[Oswald Chesterfield Cobblepot]

Thank you so much, it seems like the negative is the only thing thats helps me get through it. I've tried looking at the posotive side ever since I was little, but it never works. Oh well, I'm glad you liked it :)

[Debbie_Philly]

Sometimes the negative helps more with my writing.... I just meant dont let anyone tell you your not good enough :)

[Oswald Chesterfield Cobblepot]

Oh :) I understand now :D

[WordlessFacade]

Aw, I hope you feel better, and your poem's really good! :)

[Oswald Chesterfield Cobblepot]

Thank you so much :) I'm glad you liked it. Life just gets so annoying sometimes, ya know. Everyones always telling you your wrong :/ it gets down right annoying

[WordlessFacade]

Yea I know how you feel.

[Kawaiikitty96]

I know that feeling. Doesn't it always seem that nothing helps when you feel miserable and disgusted with life? I also love this poem as well. I especially loved the rhyming technique of "nuisance" and "translucent".

[Oswald Chesterfield Cobblepot]

:) Thank you so much, and it does always seem that way, nothing brings me up it always shoots me way back down

[Jennie Baron]

Feeling so dark sometimes comes with being so young. Fortunately many of us writers find words cathartic, therapeutic. I'm reminded of similar bad days. But the dark mood is what makes this poem so beautiful.

[Oswald Chesterfield Cobblepot]

It seems that my dark days make for good poetry. Thank you so much, I'm glad you liked it :)

[Ghost of Jupiter]

A heartfelt piece, that you crafted magnificently. We all have those broken records playing in our heads... the words carelessly spoken that slice through the heart and leave scares. Getting past them and seeing they were speaking out of their own misguidance and ignorance is the hard part. That is when your writing will come to be your healing catalyst. Keep using your pen to spill the pain upon the page... it works wonders for the soul, and you get some amazing pieces of poetry from those emotional bleeds, as well. Keep up the good work.

[Oswald Chesterfield Cobblepot]

Thank you so much :) I'm so glad you liked it

[Zahra]

Honest words nicely woven into this poem. I can understand what's being said here, it is really common and effects a person very much

[Aethereal]

Great poem! Your poem expresses a common dilemma that has always existed to some degree or another both among people and nations. You tell them, but they don't listen. They tell you, but it translates as pain. Empathy’s a two way street, but everyone behaves insane. Power rules, but all the inmates have taken over the Asylum. Extinction is next, Armageddon, but for the saving grace of the reestablishment of mutual empathy. Everyone should listen! You’re not just alone, everyone’s alone.

[Oswald Chesterfield Cobblepot]

That is honestly the best way I have ever heard someone explain it :D I'm so glad you liked it, and I hope you review more :)

[Aethereal]

You're welcome!

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

There's so much emotion in piece, these negative messages really know how to destroy one's confidence about themselves. It's heartbreaking to hear other people pass judgement on to you. Your a very talented writer. I loved this piece.

Kaze~ :-)

[Oswald Chesterfield Cobblepot]

thank you so much :) It's hard having to deal with it, time and time alllll day lol, it gets on my nerves

[♔ CrownedDevil ☾]

Your very welcome. It really does, I used to get bullied when I was in Primary school. But know that I'm in High School I don't bullied as bad as what I in primary school.

[Oswald Chesterfield Cobblepot]

I used to get bullied so bad :( I got called fat, weirdo, mommy's boy. :( it hurts ya know, even though I'm 16, it still hurts to remember it

[♔ CrownedDevil ☾]

It does hurt. :-(