Daddy

I know we fight and argue
and disagree a lot,
But daddy I love you.
You are all I've got.

Reviews

[M. L. Zane]

I didn't see this request from you until just now. Whoops. Anyway, there's not a whole lot to analyze here since it's a rather short piece. It is a very sweet gesture, but as a poem this is one of your weaker ones. You have a real talent for imagery and a way with words. Because of how short this is and that it is most likely a dedication, you aren't putting what you specialize in within the work. That's a shame, because this would be just as kind of a gesture if it were a longer piece. I strongly, strongly recommend that you add more to this. Give it a little anecdote, and let the reader know your father as well as yourself. We don't know your father, and thus without any experience to go off of, these are just words. You are capable of much more than just words. I've seen your style, and I feel as if you were afraid to take a risk with this piece. Be fearless in your work, and others will be unafraid to love it.

In other words, it is a concept with potential. It isn't *bad*, but it is definitely a weaker piece when compared to some of your other work (which sadly I haven't been able to review all of yet). This entire four liner might be a good way to end a larger poem, though. It sounds like text put inside a birthday or holiday card to let our loved ones know we have never forgotten them. Experiment with this, and add much more to it. As always, I'll be keeping my eyes open.

Regards,
-M. L. Zane

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

It's a really nice piece. Great job.

[Simon Welsh]

Short and sweet! Nice. :)

[SAYED THANGAL]

the real touching words from within, well done.
sayed thangal

[Audrey Bowers]

I love the poem. :) It has so much feeling in one stanza. Great job.

[marty360]

Short, sweet and simple :)
Nicely penned :)

~ M

[Moebia]

Short and sweet...Nice...

[Alex]

It is very endearing and sweet. The challenge of teenagers, loving their parents but their growing independence.

[Echoes of Eros]

It is a beautiful devotion that desires to stay and to love even in the mists of anger and pain. xo

[Vidya Bacchus]

A lovely tribute to your dad:)