Clairvoyant

Written for the Magritte contest

small space
curled tightly
walls will crumble
wings will unfurl
what once was dormant

waiting

will               fly                  away

    air                           light                    wings

merrily                      singing

melodic                notes              perched             on              vision

Reviews

[aponijose]

The gravity of your piece really is surprising. It is more so considering the simplicity of the words you use. I really do think that you are talented. You are a magician with the ability to turn paper airplanes into carrier ships ready to rescue soldiers from the war. Imagine what you can do when your poetic voice meets metal.

You can probably end poverty as we know it.

[Emily B]

it occurs to me i haven't been using my voice in exactly the right way . . . so much work to be done

[Micheal Teal]

As a professional psychic I found this poem quite enchanting. Your words flow effortlessly cascading over my soul like raindrops from heaven. Next time the spirits talk to me I will tell them of the beautiful poem I read that they too may be blessed.

[Brentley]

The title completes this poem perfectly. It's like maybe snippets of conversations? I don't know, but I like the whole idea and how you wrote it.

[Dezaraye]

I love this piece, Emily. It is so free and light. I love that feeling and the way you've expressed that.

[Lorraine Pearson]

I enjoyed this. The title tripped me up...I see this lovely creature emerging after a long wait...and flying off to be all that is was meant to be from the very start. Creative set up for your words...it painted a great soaring picture. :)
~Lorraiyne

[J]

Ha, much better! From unfurled at the start to spinning, spinning outwards... the visual impact gives this more flavour, more... of a psychological arty twist.

Now... it looks like a flying saucer, haha... more in keeping with the surreal theme, I think, don't you?
=)

[Ken Simm.]

Feels like the opening of a chrysalis. Wonderful.

[J]

A Magritte contest, huh? If I'd have known (or actually bother to peruse these contests now) I would've entered too, haha.

Lots of 'w' and 'l' alliterations in this piece. I found lines 3 and 10 to be most in accordance with my idea of surrealism. And being centred, was this piece supposed to look like a chess pawn? It sure looks like it.

[E. M. Murren]

This is really a fine meditation. It really leaves me with something to think about. Fine work.

[The Archangel Gabriel]

Very nice. Very surreal. Interesting mental picture.

-Gabe

[logmein]

Em, I love this. I just love how the words capture this feeling. We all long to feel like this in our lives. I think you found your words. Unfurl has to be my favorite word in this piece.