Clairvoyant

Written for the Magritte contest

small space
curled tightly
walls will crumble
wings will unfurl
what once was dormant

waiting

will               fly                  away

    air                           light                    wings

merrily                      singing

melodic                notes              perched             on              vision

Reviews

[aponijose]

The gravity of your piece really is surprising. It is more so considering the simplicity of the words you use. I really do think that you are talented. You are a magician with the ability to turn paper airplanes into carrier ships ready to rescue soldiers from the war. Imagine what you can do when your poetic voice meets metal.

You can probably end poverty as we know it.

[Emily B]

it occurs to me i haven't been using my voice in exactly the right way . . . so much work to be done

[Collect-Eye]

The line "merrily singing" gives this an explosive quality, in the context of the visual form, and in other ways..but in a creative way, rather than destructive..brilliant Emily..

I'm reading through some of your comments..especially Angel Cantera's..he's right on the money..and it explains the effect you've had on me as a person and my writing..as so does this piece.

You got many good responses, and you deserved every one of them!

awesome..I'm happy to understand you a little more each day [=

[Plexiglass]

Ok, I may have a slightly ridiculous comment later but first, this is a good poem and I do like it. The language fits the subject and it is lite and elegant. I think the form of it is my favorite part and how the form mimics what's going on in the poem is very well done here. This is the ridiculous comment part, I kind of almost want it to constrict again in another stanza and of course this isn't necessary and it is strong as it is now but the poem is called clairvoyant and its about what will be but I kind of wanted to see more of how things are at the end. But hey, even less than a nitpick. I really liked it like all of your stuff that I've read.

[G]

Well said and nice picture. I feel like I am flying

[robin]

Oh yes, see, I knew you had it all...so now tell me what you really think...I loved this for it's simple truth quality and so lyrical to boot!

[penloverfool]

the style and wordings conceptualize a genuine literary beauty.

overall, the piece captivates the interests of the readers to contemplate more beyond the theme...

[Angelic Darkness]

I love the way the poem moves, and the shape, and the story
it tells, yet leaves you wondering....

[Poeticpiers]

Interesting format well suited to the content

[garrett]

i like the shape

[garrett]

i like how the letters were spred out