The Mighty Do Fall

Sort of a fun story

Said the mighty moon to the stars,

"Look how small you all are!
I bring light to the world,
Time after time,
As you all struggle from afar".

"While I stand alone,
You serve me, and my throne;
No one cares much for a star".

The stars for years had served the moon
With not so much as a single outcry,
But one brave star,
With passion in his heart, yelled,
"Alone we may be small, but together we fill the sky!".

"Oh my what is this?" The mighty moon sneered.
"A tiny yell filled with pride? Please tell me more,
Shine bright, do not hide!"

The outspoken star
Had inspired a few more
To raise their voice
And speak their mind.

"You're as hard as stone".
"And as cold as ice".
"Changes in you bring troubled tides".

"You wax and you wane,
Diminishing with each phase".
"We bring life long after we die,
Shining still bright after our days".

"What hope we bring as we fall!".
Then the star who spoke first,
Perhaps said it best of all,

"One night you show full,
But that should not bring you such pride,
There's also one night,
You struggle to shine at all".

The stars then all began to sing
Together, a night-sky harmony.
The man in the moon then began to weep,
Thew himself at their feet,

His throne fallen, and gone.

Then in his utter defeat,
He slunk off in retreat,
To give way to the morning Sun.

Reviews

[DCT ponderings]

It beckoned the power of individual voices when come together creating something quite bright. There is nothing like the splendor of a star filled night. I liked the dialogue.

Reminded me of my favorite poem and the only one I have memorized called the man in the moon written for me by a friend years ago.

[Emily Feret]

Wow, I loved what you just wrote. Thank you so so much for your review! :)

[Mauricio Montoya]

Wow! I like how this piece comes together, I know the answer we seek is out there some where but first we must finish our task here on earth.
Excellent write.

[Emily Feret]

Thank you for readin!

[Mauricio Montoya]

you're welcome....sorry about the typo..forgot one word to complete the sentence also Ty for taking the time to read my work.

[SyberRose]

I enjoyed your celestial poem Emily...very creative...SyberRose

[Emily Feret]

Thank you so much!

[Michael G. Smith]

No one wishes on the moon.

[Emily Feret]

True :)

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Wowoweee! I like this so much. I had fun. But what I want to tell you is this: you are brilliant in making this piece. I like Personification in a piece. You nicely used it here. It has also a moral lesson to ponder. Thanks for sharing this.

[Emily Feret]

Well thank you so so much for your awesome review!!

[Creepy Swine Guy]

And of course, the mighty sun that puts the moon to rest is a star just like those tiny stars in the night.

I enjoyed this poem very much. It has a Seussean quality.

[Emily Feret]

Thank you so much!

[Trigorin]

Not bad. You have a nice reversal of the stereotypical roles of the moon and the sun, and you've used some great imagery in this. Don't forget that you don't have to cap every line - you could take out basically all the commas in this and it would read much better, I think. Good story and good execution, well done.

[Emily Feret]

Thank you for your ind words and helpful review!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Hmm seems I want to sleep after reading this poem, love to sleep with those stars and moon in my dreams. Stunning poem and have a lot of connection, it is engaging and beautifully written. Thanks for sharing Em. :)

[Emily Feret]

What compliment. Thank you so much for your kind words Marc!

[Rick Puetter]

Dear Emily,

I like this piece quite a lot. The simplicity of the world view is its charm, the moon and stars talking. Nothing over interpreted. Just simple, anthropomorphized moon and stars. Wonderful. And yes, the mighty do fail.

A nice piece.

Best regards,

Rick

[Emily Feret]

Thank you so much Rick. What kind words!

[Pax]

i see the abstraction in how you put the dialog together... a free verse of emtional poem... i love the imagery and the wisdom you shine in this write...

"Changes in you bring troubled tides". ~ that alone speaks alot!

great work!

[Emily Feret]

What a great review! Thank you so much for your kind words Pax!

[SHEEMA HUQ]

I think that you have mastered the art of story telling, great work

[Emily Feret]

Wow, what a compliment! Thank you so much!