When I Die

When I Die

A Poem by Einstein Noodle

When I die

the lure was educational                                     
                                                        
She wasn't trying to open discussions

So                           I said nothing

She carried the weight 
all the  power in her favor
all the world  .................................................and
the passing are no matter                      at all   
                             really

calm hand       
                       spine tingling fingers        
                                                                 cold  wrapping those
finely tuned strings of spun corruption
 'round and round and 
                                                         around the whole of things                                                               
those                     specific colors and       feathered flavors  
those                     specific species                       in it 
from the beginning and
now the end

falling ...................  

E.

© 2021 Einstein Noodle


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Death is luring though it is cold, so true! We try to get ourself out of its grasp, and so it's a taboo thing to talk to. So we can not cope up with the loss, when it became inevitable. It's a tragedy. We have to be more open to it, such that passing can be a normal thing among lives..... So nicely written poem this is

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Einstein Noodle

2 Weeks Ago

thank you for your kind review, Sima! yes! i think you are exactly right and you have summed up the .. read more



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As birth puts things across the windshield driving the intricacies of life, its hills and valleys, death puts things in the rear view mirror then when we ascend and be in the bird's eye view. The great equalizer. This poem speaks volumes about this very sensitive reality. With a master's pen, you use great wordings and structure to convey the message sir.

Posted 3 Days Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Days Ago

thanks Sami .. you are very kind in your review .. i am totally gratified it spoke to you .. we need.. read more
Sami Khalil

2 Days Ago

All true and well said sir. We sure need those discussions. Puts things in real perspectives. You a.. read more
This write is so detailed and filled with emotion and depth. Reading this took me from the beginning to the end with a hook in the details. I don't come across poems about death often, but for such a topic this one would be the best. tyfs

Posted 1 Week Ago


Einstein Noodle

6 Days Ago

so great to have your visits sir! and thank you so much for sharing your reactions .. as a species w.. read more
The one certainty that is ever watchful. Dear E - this made me tearful - something about the structure and pace, the ebb and flow to it - your poetry never ceases to move me and I am blessed to read you here :) Stay safe :)

Posted 1 Week Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Week Ago

aww you put the blush in me Irish cheeks young lady! thank you so much for your review .. its encour.. read more
The structure of this piece adds to its overall feel - pausing, starting, falling... much like life and death itself. A reminder to walk with purpose in this world, for certain.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Weeks Ago

i sure like the positive take you have on reading this one ...and thank you for letting me know your.. read more
Not only is this an amazingly intricate and haunting poem, but the layout is also wonderful! Not often do we think a layout could make a piece of poetry better, but you certainly did it. I love that you changed the Grim Reaper to a 'she' as we often get it portrayed as male so often! Death is such an inevitable, tragic thing and yet it's so normal and just another beautiful part of life as cold and awful as it also is, and you portrayed that wonderfully here. Your words are incredible and your creativity is unmatchable.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Weeks Ago

phhhhhhhhh thank you so much Colacat .. you are very kind .. and truly your review humbles me .. rea.. read more
Death is luring though it is cold, so true! We try to get ourself out of its grasp, and so it's a taboo thing to talk to. So we can not cope up with the loss, when it became inevitable. It's a tragedy. We have to be more open to it, such that passing can be a normal thing among lives..... So nicely written poem this is

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Einstein Noodle

2 Weeks Ago

thank you for your kind review, Sima! yes! i think you are exactly right and you have summed up the .. read more
most prefer to never think about it. is it an end or a new beginning. shutting out the lights. such confronting power in your words and structure. there is longevity in my in-laws family. wife's grandmother lived to 102 - said she was tired of hanging around. they used to say, "we don't die, you have to shoot us". both feeling and thought-provoking ... :)

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Weeks Ago

yes! i think we need to talk about it .. maybe even try to get to a point that we can rejoice in dea.. read more
I often wonder if death is ever remorseful in the ending of a shining spirit one that glows and bristles with the joy of life in spite of all the wretched cast upon them. I wonder if death ever has regret in its work? Do you think a poem that perseveres long after its author is like a dagger in death's mandate? LOL well I think it might just be a band-aid for them both brother poet

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Weeks Ago

i have never considered it Bad One! She's rather impersonal in this one ... ;) i think your thought .. read more
something we all find ourselves in one way or another but she has a grasp on it of knowing the truth

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


Einstein Noodle

3 Weeks Ago

yes She does Wordman .. death is a depth of wisdom no doubt. ... personally speaking .. i think all .. read more
 wordman

3 Weeks Ago

youu`re welcome e
When I did then will i belong to things. Demonstrations. Scenes. Events. But alive I am only in training for the young funeral director to get in his OJT by stitching my cold lips closed or applying makeup to where my hair line is no longer human. /But if I live and there is a tree near, I promise to hug it. to dig my toe-nails deep into it's bark and twist open a sore to let the gasses out. As for that combination of greed and animus,
ain't no cure for that. dana

Posted 4 Weeks Ago


Einstein Noodle

4 Weeks Ago

hey Dana! you are a deep thinker and its reflected in your review .. i am a fuddy duddy ... what is .. read more

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