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When I Die

When I Die

A Poem by Einstein Noodle
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thank you KWP for giving me that last line and word on this one... it is changed from "falling" to "fading" ... it takes a village eh!? ;)

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When I die

the lure was educational                                     
                                                        
She wasn't trying to open discussions

So                           I said nothing

She carried the weight 
all the  power in her favor
all the world  .................................................and
the passing are no matter                      at all   
                             really

calm hand       
                       spine tingling fingers        
                                                                 cold  wrapping those
finely tuned strings of spun corruption
 'round and round and 
                                                         around the whole of things                                                               
those                     specific colors and       feathered flavors  
those                     specific species                       in it 
from the beginning and
now the end

fading ...................  

E.

© 2021 Einstein Noodle


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I was drawn to the title. Oh, how we avoid death at all costs, especially talking about it.
Death in Western countries is just taboo. Actually, I think we would rather say people expired.
I think it is brave to talk about it, maybe make the journey more bearable at the end.
Tough poem this one, a thought for the day.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Einstein Noodle

1 Month Ago

thanks so much Paul .. I think you are absolutely right .. we should talk about it along with every .. read more
Paul Bell

1 Month Ago

I think it's a British thing, death is the person next door, he or she was old, so it was expected. .. read more
Einstein Noodle

1 Month Ago

not just the Brits ;) ..............................



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I was also drawn to the title, taking about and accepting death may make it less unbearable for us when loved ones leave, or for when our own day finally comes.
I really enjoyed the fleeting nature of the structure,
and, the mummification of the poem itself as well as within.
Great stuff!
Thank you, Laura.

Posted 1 Month Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Month Ago

thanks again Ms. Kate .. for visiting and leaving your reactions .. how else do we know right?! I am.. read more
Laura Kate

1 Month Ago

Sounds wonderful :)
Laura.
A wonderful write my friend. Gives one much to ponder about. ~Sharon

Posted 1 Month Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Month Ago

what a treat to have you stop by Sharon!! thanks so much! glad you found something in this one that .. read more
I was drawn to the title. Oh, how we avoid death at all costs, especially talking about it.
Death in Western countries is just taboo. Actually, I think we would rather say people expired.
I think it is brave to talk about it, maybe make the journey more bearable at the end.
Tough poem this one, a thought for the day.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Einstein Noodle

1 Month Ago

thanks so much Paul .. I think you are absolutely right .. we should talk about it along with every .. read more
Paul Bell

1 Month Ago

I think it's a British thing, death is the person next door, he or she was old, so it was expected. .. read more
Einstein Noodle

1 Month Ago

not just the Brits ;) ..............................
We are all a state of "fading," excellent close btw... and "she wasn't trying to open discussions," almost made me toss my phone for not thinking of it first! Lol that was such a writer's line, if I've ever heard one! Excellent piece!

Posted 1 Month Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Month Ago

best review ever sir! ... thanks so much! been so unmotivated for months now .. your comments almost.. read more
Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)

1 Month Ago

I understand that state of mind... though, I do hope you find the motivation soon, brother. We would.. read more
Einstein Noodle

1 Month Ago

thank you .. you are very kind. :)
we come and then we leave ... in between we should really remember to love. Love long and hard. Love with openness, love one and love all.

this is lovely E. In the new experiences or the experiences of extremities, there is a true chance of understanding ... we as humans quite often do not realise this, it's important, like you have done here with your words - to reflect and acknowledge the everywhen.

LOVE to YOU E X

Posted 2 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Months Ago

oh! I like that even better ... fading! perfect .. may I use it ma'am! ;)
KWP

2 Months Ago

What’s mine is ours 😊
Einstein Noodle

2 Months Ago

I luv you Elizabeth! going to change it right now .. thanks .. its the word I was looking for!
As birth puts things across the windshield driving the intricacies of life, its hills and valleys, death puts things in the rear view mirror then when we ascend and be in the bird's eye view. The great equalizer. This poem speaks volumes about this very sensitive reality. With a master's pen, you use great wordings and structure to convey the message sir.

Posted 2 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Months Ago

thanks Sami .. you are very kind in your review .. i am totally gratified it spoke to you .. we need.. read more
Sami Khalil

2 Months Ago

All true and well said sir. We sure need those discussions. Puts things in real perspectives. You a.. read more
This write is so detailed and filled with emotion and depth. Reading this took me from the beginning to the end with a hook in the details. I don't come across poems about death often, but for such a topic this one would be the best. tyfs

Posted 2 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Months Ago

so great to have your visits sir! and thank you so much for sharing your reactions .. as a species w.. read more
The one certainty that is ever watchful. Dear E - this made me tearful - something about the structure and pace, the ebb and flow to it - your poetry never ceases to move me and I am blessed to read you here :) Stay safe :)

Posted 3 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

3 Months Ago

aww you put the blush in me Irish cheeks young lady! thank you so much for your review .. its encour.. read more
The structure of this piece adds to its overall feel - pausing, starting, falling... much like life and death itself. A reminder to walk with purpose in this world, for certain.

Posted 3 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

3 Months Ago

i sure like the positive take you have on reading this one ...and thank you for letting me know your.. read more
Not only is this an amazingly intricate and haunting poem, but the layout is also wonderful! Not often do we think a layout could make a piece of poetry better, but you certainly did it. I love that you changed the Grim Reaper to a 'she' as we often get it portrayed as male so often! Death is such an inevitable, tragic thing and yet it's so normal and just another beautiful part of life as cold and awful as it also is, and you portrayed that wonderfully here. Your words are incredible and your creativity is unmatchable.

Posted 3 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

3 Months Ago

phhhhhhhhh thank you so much Colacat .. you are very kind .. and truly your review humbles me .. rea.. read more

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