A Talented Find

My talents are covered in dust,

Left out to rot,

On the edges, 

Forming orange rust,

Like old moldy cheese,

Or a baren infertile woman,

Like fruit to a thorn bush,

My talents are to me,

Clouds fading in the sky,

Child wishing his mother goodbye,

Tears dripping far from an eye,

From me my talents hide,

To search for water in a dry well,

Or treasure in a paupers house,

My shadow can not lie,

My talents can not die,

Sometimes in life we must marry fate,

Or befriend the very ones who display pure hate,

Make love to one who's blind,

Or seem mean, to a child so kind,

Leave the ones we love,

Forgive the ones who've wronged us,

Steal for what we believe,

And Comfort the rich with our words,

These long nights will never end,

Darkness will always confine love,

But if I make peace, 

And set my grudges free,

My long lost talent will shine above,

Author's Note

I think this is deep. I'm not sure how clear the message is. Or even if i understand the full message.

Reviews

[Robert Tusitala O'Neill]

Excellent poem...I am glad I can see your improvement just within what you have posted here. This is certainly much better than your earlier works on here. I like the line, "From me my talents hide." That is a great way to put it. We must marry fate, 'tis true, though she be a cruel mistress. Your long lost talent is shining in this one. Oddly, but for the last two lines I might omit the rest of the last stanza. For once I think you wrote enough and may want to remove something. This is a very good poem which feels in context and feels like it really says something everyone can relate to...However, it is also a great demonstration of all I was saying earlier about putting enough of a frame around something and giving it context. This poem has exactly what I was saying!!! Good work!!!

[Faithfuldream]

Thanks Robert. I felt i connected more to this one. A lot of my other writings i write quickly just to write. To try and explore a feeling. Not always do i connect. This poem i believed in.

[Robert Tusitala O'Neill]

I think this is key. The more you write the more you can not only use your skills that are just a reflex at that point, but also you can more easily believe in your writing because you know what you have believed in up until then, and you feel you are building on something. This is why it takes a long time to become a great writer, I think. Few people start out as good as you, honestly.

[Lydia Shutter]

Good introspection in this poem. The rhyme is a little scattered, but where you use it, it is effective.

"Sometimes in life we must marry fate,
Or befriend the very ones who display pure hate"

Such true words. We must learn to roll with the punches even when it seems to be counter productive at first. Interesting life observations in this one. Lydi**

[Julie Spade]

Holy s**t! This poem is excellent! I was blown away in each stanza. It's breath taking and inspirational. I can felt the depth of it and I can connect with the story you are portraying. I envision my struggles and others and positively think others feel the same way I do! Also I wanted to mention that t's okay to not understand the full message of your OWN poem as long as you have a specific concept the concept will take its shape as you read it over and over again to find new symbolic features within it. Sometimes, I don't even know what I am writing but then the people who read my poems let me know or like I said I reread it to the point where it sinks in and it is a part of me emotionally. Keep going with this hidden talent of yours!

[Sami Khalil]

Your talent shines through...A splendid poem...:)..................

[Lucy Morningstar &heart..]

This is certainly a very interesting read. I like the message here and whatnot, and how its not really conventional rhyming and whatnot which I like. I hate it when everyone feels like poetry has to rhyme and stuff but its like...why? You have a lot of great rhymes here but its not conventional...I dont know lol Don't mind me. It was really great :)

[Faithfuldream]

Thank you again Lucy. It just came out the way it did. The rhyming pattern was weird, i wasn't sure if it flowed but it is the way it is.

[Lucy Morningstar ♥]

it works well so dw about it lol