Unknown Jesus

Unknown Jesus

A Poem by Life Inside Death

 

Looking down on you

All I can do is smile

When you’re happy, I’m happy

Even just for a while

 

But watching you

From this cross built in the sky

I can’t help but wonder

Why did I have to die?

 

To be so attached to someone

It was so surreal

To think I’d sacrifice myself

Because of what others feel

 

And until I died

You never knew I cared

The whole time I protected you

I did what no one dared

 

And so I’m hanging…

This crucifix pins me

To the days where I used to laugh

The days I used to cry

 

You’re nothing but a dream now

A dream I’ll never wake up from

And as my hands bleed for your happiness

I stay looking at you, hoping you noticed me

 

 Even if you had no God

I’m the one you can call a “savior”

I’ll be the one who drags you

Back into the light

I’m your destiny

I’m the Unknown Jesus.

© 2008 Life Inside Death


Author's Note

Life Inside Death
sorry if i offended anyone

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I don't find this offensive at all.
I find it inspiring...

"And until I died
You never knew I cared
The whole time I protected you
I did what no one dared..."

What is great about this piece
is the show of love and sacrifice for
in the name of love... a love for
mankind that even mankind doesn't
have for themselves. This inspires
regardless to one's beliefs.

Spiritually, I think we've all got so
much to learn -- we truly are
kindergarteners when it comes
to comprehension of our spiritual
self.. love.. faith...truth.

This is a wonderful piece!

Thank you for sharing it! :)





Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Good job! The words are stranded good together! ^^;
It wasn't as religious as I thought by the title.
It turned out very good! Bravo! :)

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

see now... shane........ c'mon now.....

Posted 16 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

i am a christian. i wasn't offended by this piece but rather confused. maybe i'm just missing something. from whose point of view are you writing and why exactly would you think a christian would be offended?

Posted 16 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

EXCELLENT! good flow of words and your are putting yourself in Jesus's shoes to offer a lesson for your readers.
dont be ashamed of this piece. If someone is to much of a jesus freak to missthe valuable lesson in this peice they should have never been allowed to read it. excellent work

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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