UNLEASHED

You're either on my side, or you're in my way

Can you see the emptiness in my life?

 

My mind does not function in a strictly

Logical, linear fashion

 

I've been trapped in a vicious circle,

 

I suffer from my own mental attacks,

 

I am the victim of my own mind,

 

But I'm not always aware of being a victim,

 

Why do I keep blowing on the embers

Of past pain and mistakes?

 

I no longer want to go unnoticed

 

Now, I cry out to the whole world

 

I AM HERE!!!!

 

I am a force to be reckoned with,

Are you ready for me?......

Author's Note

Time for me to achieve positive growth on a personal level.

Reviews

[~SouthernGirl~]

Very meaningful and deep. I like this. Wonderful write. :)

[Ana Drake]

I absolutely love this, weirdly as I read it I feel like you're talking directly to me. It's deep, I really like it. :)

[badwriter]

I love this. I'm not really qualified to critique poetry, but I can tell you this piece spoke to me on many levels. I can feel your pain, but also hope and empowerment. I'm glad you are here and ready to shout out to the whole world. There is a place for all of us, especially a writer of your talent. Thank you for sharing this poem.

[Rob Santana]

thanks for your review. I'm not holding back anymore!!!

[LoveWords]

Very meaningful!

[Rob Santana]

Thank you LW..

[JustAnotherDreamer]

With the crying out, it seems like you want to be noticed for something else than what you were before. Something better and better improved. I especially like the part about the embers; that was a clever analogy.

[Rob Santana]

That's exactly right! Tired of people dwelling on my past.thanks for the review

[JustAnotherDreamer]

It was a piece to easily review ^ ^

[Natasha]

i can definitely relate to this. for years i was always focusing on others achievements and trying to be better than them or comparing myself to others and being pessimistic and depressed..it's good you have recognized that it is your time to shine in the world and that you have a lot to offer so you shouldn't let those haters bring you down

[Heather]

ohhhh yes you ARE HERE! What a powerful write, no longer your own victim. That moment when you decide to let your voice be heard by others, such a powerful moment...bravo!

[Rob Santana]

yes,time for growth...

[Balkaran Sidhu]

Written with Poignant...deep heart

[Rob Santana]

it came from deep,deep in my heart,haha,thanks for your comment.

[Letemdangle]

"My mind does not function in a strictly,
logical,linear fashion". Then you are one of the lucky ones.

[Rob Santana]

hahahaha,it's the truth,hahaha,yeah I know Im different or like people label me "NOT NORMAL" well you know what.....normal's boring.