Prologue

       The dim halls filled with a winter chill as students entered the building, some laughing, talking about their weekends or Christmas plans, and others were complaining about the cold early Monday morning. Valdis, a short sixteen year old girl with dark black red hair, was standing in the middle of the glum hall against the white brick wall listening to her friend talk.
        "Are you paying attention?" Sang, a tall lightly tanned fifteen year old girl with long deep chocolate brown hair, frowned.
        "Mhm." Valdis answered her friend turning her deep amethyst eyes to the pouting girl.
       Unconvinced, Sang looked behind her where Valdis's gaze was only a moment ago. A short boy, around sixteen with light messy brown hair was standing there in deep blue jeans and a black hoodie with some unknown design. With a roll of her eyes she turned back to Valdis.
        "You're staring at him again." She stated a little harshly.
        "Am not." Valdis glared slightly, which wasn't much of a change on her emotionlessly expressed face, "I do not lower myself to love."
        "Right." Sang rolled her emerald eyes, "Even if you did, he wouldn't talk to you. Just forget it."
        The bell rang sharply and the two girls slipped silently side by side into the noisy crowd of students.

Reviews

[A Taste Of Blood]

Dont bite me for saying this, but i think for the amount of detail given, and how for every description you used 2-3 words listed with commas, it kinda ruined the flow for me. possibly if you extended it, and separated the descriptions? but since i lack in descriptions of people, i dont have much to say, i do clearly picture these characters. so. :3

[Courtney]

I like it. You should right some more

[Cafe Reader]

I like this. It is very descriptive with good dioluge.

[Jennika has a short att..]

I like Sang cuz I can actually pronounce her name without asking for help xD. I love it, and I want to read more! :D

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

For some reason I saw a scene in shades of brown.
It was monochromatic, but Valdis glowed in vivid color.
You do an excellent job of framing your scenery.

[Forgotten]

I just want to say, firtsly you spelt prologue wrong =P but ill admit i very much liked this, i see this becoming a very good book. You know im writing a book too, i was wondering if you'd like to give it a look over? send me a message if u do =D