S.L.U.T

a poem about a girl who used to be my best friend, but she decided she'd rather sleep around, then have any real friends, and just left me.

Does it feel good?

knowing nobody loves you,

knowing you left us all behind,

Knowing that your being used.

 

Do you realise?

That your privacy is online,

That you're labelled 'A good time'

You lost all our respect.

 

Do you notice?

your just an object,

some one to f**k with,

with no added drama,

 

Does your daddy know?

You slept with every boy in town,

Bet your mummy doesn't realise,

that your sleeping around.

 

Do you feel good?

when you look at yourself in the mirror,

you're all alone now.

Is it all becoming clearer?

 

Are you surprised?

That you don't have a disease,

That they aren't coming back for more?

That you turned out to be a f*****g w***e.

Author's Note

#I don't like swearing, usually i avoid it, but this is about something that has hurt me alot, and I just needed to use those words, the wounds haven't healed yet and I feel so strongly about this!!! so im sorry if that word offends you.

Reviews

[5minutesofcrazy]

This is just beautiful. The raw emotions that are left here are quite powerful, and you've been able to harness them just enough to create something with them. It is a powerful work that is easily relatable. I feel that too many times we don't give anger enough credit for it's power to be creative, but this proves that wrong. The structure is nice, repeating a question is brilliant. I'd love to know what sparked this gem to be written. Thank you.

[Tapher]

a very direct way of addressing a problem and using the strongest possible language and imagry you could, it was very deep and it shows your not afraid to say whats on your mind, it was very deep and i hope that whatever pain it was deep inside that caused this, is solved very soon, keep holding on.

[Maximillion]

very well witen and i loved it

[Leigh]

Sorry your friendship broke up over such a sad reason, but these things happen, nicely written poem with very strong emotions to suit the subject

[I'm Just me:)]

no dont dis ur poem it works out perfectly i love how this all goes together its awesome i love it

[Draven]

Um, well, this is a difficult review to make.... Its a little harsh, but then again, its supposed to be. I kinda like it, its skillfully worded and it packs a good punch. Definatly good for getting your point across. You are obviously someone that I dont wanna piss off. ; )

[Sleeping Maiden]

This is amazing. Powerful write. I'm sorry your friend did that. Sometimes friends do change... whether it be good or bad.. we all make our own choices..
I love the emotions here. It's so deep. I felt the ache, the pain...the anger....
This is so well done. =) Great job!

[SkrillexLover :)]

The swearing did not offend me, BTW. And, I'm actually glad you used them because it gives off the strong feelings you have put in this poem. It really does show, in the poem, that you have strong feelings about this subject. Lovely poem :) It describes exactly what a ____ is! Good job! :)

[MandaBear]

I love it :) such emotions brought out so well. good job :)

[Pikachu]

Wow. That's like a punch in the face to like millions of girls!

Lovely write.