S.O.S.

Hubby has to have a long series of surgeries.

D o u b t 

{Hasachokehold} 

 And I am going

                      D 

                        O 

                          W

                             N 

                          Under       WaVeS 

                                    the 

                            Into the pools of

                              Nothingness 

 My MOUNTAIN is now 

The rock I hold

 His weight...oo

                     oo

                        Oo

                           O 

                           Anchors me 

    I am not sure I can Surface this time 

 I barely have EnerGy for

             one

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ 

   ~~ How do I ~~~ swim~~~ for two~~

 ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ 

    So we are

                     STuCK

  ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ 

                ( Head Under)

 

                  H2O 

 For the n e x t  18  m   o  n    t   h  s

                ... --- ...  

                  

                   This is my S.O.S

Author's Note

Tell me what you think and feel about this. I will explain at a later time what is going on or go to my blog.

Reviews

[RiverRei]

This is amazing. I've never seen a poem formatted this way ever and I found it highly addicting to read. This will be going in my library for sure. It was easy to read and you made it seem so easy to write something so beautiful with fonts and colors that matched your words. It does make me worry about you though, momma, so message me and let me know what's going on cuz I'm gonna worry until I know you're okay. I'm a worrier. Love you, Momma!!! *HUGS*

[JayceeC]

I'm glad you liked it. This was my brain needing distraction. Go to my profile and read the second blog. Then message me if you have questions. I am fine now...this helped.

[Carrie.]

I like how effortless you make this look. You did a great job with the visual aspect of this.

I send well wishes to your husband. :)

[JayceeC]

My mind needed the distraction of creating this. I just let the creative side have its way with a little bit of frustration and change as I moved it from word processor to the site.
Thanks for the wishes Carrie. My weeks are filled with Dr appointments.

[Carrie.]

I can't imagine. Keep strong, Jan.

[Chris]

an interesting visual format... a strong message otherwise

[JayceeC]

Interesting as you like it or do not?

[Chris]

Some need the visual cues, for others it's a fun thing... personally I believe the author makes the choice - not the reader. I picked up on the message - not the format.

[JayceeC]

Just asked, because sometimes I find this type of visuals a distraction from the message..oh well, it's not likely to become a habit, more of a stand alone piece.

[613]

The structure of this poem was very animated. I really liked it!

- Brittney

[JayceeC]

thanks for the comment. I usually do not play with structure in this way, but my brain needed a distraction.

[613]

Well it definitely worked here. Nice work.

[AaronFreitas]

Damn I'm sorry to hear about the hubby Jan... I will pray for you guys tonight. Hope everything goes good... at least he has an awesome wife to be there for him!

[JayceeC]

thanks Aaron prayers help. I am slowly getting use to the idea but it is still overwhelming when I think about it.

[Pushkar Prabhat]

WoW!!!
this is amazing......
extremely creative........
beautifully done.........
WHERE is you blog???
i loved it!!!
:)

[JayceeC]

Thanks P. You can get to my blog from the top tabs on my profile page. I only have a couple entries but I explined this.

[Pushkar Prabhat]

you are welcome..............oh i thought it was elsewhere........off i go....

[sinNsincerity]

This was amazing and creative Jan.
I loved the mountain part so much!

[JayceeC]

Thanks, I wrote this on Google drive and then had to try to make it look close here. It took me a while to edit, but not too bad. I think this is a piece that people will love or hate because of the strong visuals.

[sinNsincerity]

they would wrong to hate it...

[JayceeC]

Lol. Wel prrk prefers without..CD usually doesn't care for viduals but was very PC on his comment. .Not to everyone's taste.
w

[Willard Wells]

I will go to the blog later and tell you what I feel here with no preconceived idea. I would say you have fears and concerns about the future of the surgery and it is serious and he is your rock and how will you survive without him as your rock and now you must take on the roll and be strong. You are strong, but fear is a mighty thing. Many things in question for the next few months and how will it change your life. Complex enough that I have been reading it over and over to see if I am seeing to much or missing something. It did draw me in, but part of that is I need to step outside of my box and that may be why the visual. Just a miner change to divert the mind for a few moments. I have to divert mine all day every day. Nice piece.

[JayceeC]

You could be right about that. I told CD that it would take a psychiatrist a month of Sundays to decide why I'm playing with visuals, when I usually don't touch them unless they are naturally occurring in a poetic form like the fibonaccis. But quite possibly my brain needed the distraction, possibly from worrying more than I already do. Very perceptive of you.

[Willard Wells]

I am cheaper than all doctors. All you get from therapy is a sounding board. You get that here for free plus the release in your writing. See now you have already saved the family money.

[JayceeC]

LOL...so true! This is much more fun than therapy anyway!

[Perkele.7885]

I would rather get hit with what is going up front and right in my face where I could react with my gut, which is seldom if ever very much off the mark. You are a hands on girl. You don't need visual graphics to sell your product. I am in your corner.
I just saw the part about your Husband. I am sorry to hear this.

[JayceeC]

So does that mean you don't like the graphics Raj?

[Perkele.7885]

To be honest with you! No, not really!

[JayceeC]

I always ask for honesty! I truly can't decide if I like the graphics. This is very close to my original from my word processor, except for the color. I think the words are solid either way. my other site does not allow for much in the way of graphics so I have it there in a simplified format of this, perhaps it is better. Just not sure. I'm taking a pole, so yours is a no.

[Perkele.7885]

You are a power writer you do not need 'kid stuff'

[JayceeC]

I think that Willard was right...this is more about distracting the brain... a flight of fancy to keep me from brooding and keep me focussed on something other than the stress.

[Perkele.7885]

Is there any thing new that you feel comfortable sharing or do you wish to keep a low profile

[JayceeC]

Rag go to my blog from my profile pager the whole story is there. Just know I'm better but still a bit overwhelmed.

[Perkele.7885]

I will see if i can do that

[wordman]

sounds like you are crying out,and using this creative mood that you are in to portray your delima
loved all of it

[JayceeC]

Thanks Wordman..put up a song for you to enjoy and a brief description. Did you like the graphics or was it overkill?

[wordman]

peoples work is never an overkill jc liked the song