Let's

work in progress

Let’s forget the deadlines,

run off to NYC, stay at the Plaza,

sip warm tea from dainty cups.

Out the window, a view of central park.

 

Or a sandy shore in the Virgin Islands

under the shade of a coconut tree,

as an iguana passes by.

 

Let’s forget the demands of work

and live in Spain,

an apartment designed by Gaudi,

I can write about the sounds of night,

Spanish accents, guitars, the stars.

You can lay in moonlight.

 

Let’s fall in love with Texas,

our home, roll around in blue bonnet fields,

kiss behind haystacks.

Lay silent in the barn in the glow of one lantern.

 

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

really lovely descriptive piece...i think i'll take spain...

lived in NYC as a kid...my parents lived for a couple years in Trinidad..and then seven years in texas...so been to those places...but ah yes...

if only we could leave the work behind..the deadlines, the responsibilities to jobs and other folks...and just have that "us" time...my girlfriend and i can only dream of that now...other necessary places to be...

and they aren't the beach.


but at least for a few moments you brought me there with your write.

[JenniferMarie]

Thank you Jacob :)

[Rees Thomas]

if only we could all live like that my dear aha :)

[JenniferMarie]

So true. I had a moment. I didn't want to go to work and this is what I wrote :)

[Rees Thomas]

How in hell could a man enjoy being awakened
at 6:30 am by an alarm clock
leap out of bed
dress
force feed
s**t, piss
brush teeth and hair
and fight traffic to a place essentially
you made loads of money for
somebody else
and were asked to be grateful for the opportunity to do so....its all madness my lady aha but hopefully one day il live in spain away from it all.

[Samuel Jack]

You have the same love of adventure as me, this is a planet to be explored. When my sons older, me and my lady would love to do an American adventure, just the south, the cool bits, starting at New Orleans and ending in Texas. I think you've had more adventures than me by your poems though. Nice work

[JenniferMarie]

Thank you Samuel. I try to squeeze in adventures between my chaotic work schedule. It's important for us to live, not just work. What good is success if you're not living your leg and seeing the world. Hope you and your wife get to have adventures in America as you've mentioned.

Thank you for your review. :)

[Peter H]

now you see if you come for me , in my home country we can do all of that which is described in that poem .................... i am just messing with you lovely write it gives me deep insight to your conception on sublime love :)

[Steve]

I think one more stanza and you are done! I like it though. Its sweet.

[JenniferMarie]

Thank you Steve. I appreciate your nice review and will consider your good suggestion. I am definitely editing this. It was a quick write and now I need to go back and add, change ... edit.

[Criss ;)]

once again a great write, i love this piece again. and moreover i loved this
Let’s fall in love with Texas,
our home, roll around in blue bonnet fields,
kiss behind haystacks.
Lay silent in the barn in the glow of one lantern./.....that's really a nice way to express your views.

well penned, beautiful piece.

[JenniferMarie]

Thank you Criss. I appreciate your review its encouraging.

[Angi]

It doesn't matter where you go! The far reaches of exotic lands or home. As long as your love is along for the ride. PS bluebonnets are lovely little things! I have seen them once, they go on and on as far as the eye can see! Lovely piece, Jennifer! Angi~

[JenniferMarie]

It's so true! I just think we work so much! and what about the life! What about living?

read moreIt's so true! I just think we work so much! and what about the life! What about living?

I know i just love blue bonnets too Angie.

Thank you for your comment.

[Angi]

It's all above making a buck so you can live for the weekends. Bleeeh.

[JenniferMarie]

lol right :)