Heirloom Rose

He leans in, still face

eyelids falling

my fragrance spills like dew from a leaf

 

you are the sweetest of all the others


 

I gaze at him the way I look at the moon,

and uncurl under shade of a tree

in the quietest moment of afternoon

 

Days pass, I see him

beyond the leafy pool


Do you see me?

You, seated at a table with a woman,

a woman who makes you laugh

all day together

until evening rain begins,

your suit jacket like an awning in wind

 

I have no voice to call

My reach, determined, fails

I am just a face

beyond a window full of rain,

falling like stars.

 

He will come back

Why doesn’t he come back?

 

Because, it is like that sometimes, my friend whispers

 

her hair brushing against my cheek

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[ToneWolf]

Awesome, I was expecting thorns in there :)

[JenniferMarie]

Thank you. Haha maybe on the edited version :)

[Clayton Bardwell]

Very interesting, this. Is it about the rose? Is there a deeper meaning? Lust? Yearning? Desire? Hmmm, I must mull on this as bit. I like it.

[JenniferMarie]

I was in a workshop one time and she asked us to write from a flowers perspective or it could be anything a cloud a soda can .. I was stumped then months later I wrote this, my effort to complete that assignment.

[Clayton Bardwell]

It worked. Tenacious:) Sounds like a good exercise for me to try. I once heard an actress give accolades to a male screen writer for being able to write from a woman's perspective.

[JenniferMarie]

Thank you Clayton.

[EmpressPoetess]

I felt longing, I felt sadness, eagerness. This is deeply emotional. Very good!

[JenniferMarie]

Thanks so much Empress. I appreciate your comment.

[wunder]

~“I have no voice to call
My reach, determined, fails
I am just a face
beyond a window full of rain,
falling like stars.”~

~wonderful poem & verse!!!~ :)

[JenniferMarie]

Thanks so much :) your review means a lot and helps me to see what lines stood out. I look forward to reading your work as well.

[wunder]

~you're very welcome - as always - my pleasure~ :)

[zainul]

Wonderful work on love and passion.
Love the stanza very much:

"I gaze at him the way I look at the moon,
and uncurl under shade of a tree
in the quietest moment of afternoon"

[JenniferMarie]

Thank you so much Zainul. Means so much. Thank you for taking the time to read my poem. I appreciate it.

[zainul]

You are most welcome.
This is a great pleasure of mine.

[Nelson72552]

This is a pretty poem - beautiful really. Thank you

[JenniferMarie]

Thank you Nelson. Means a lot.