The Eyes Which Hold the Universe

This is my first villanelle:)

 

What is a smile?

in a pair of sparkling irises it lies

I think I'll stay here for a while

because his absence brings unavoidable sighs

I always wonder when he cries,

"What is a smile?"

Its a calloused hand that tries

to wipe away the traces of worldly lies

I think I'll stay here for a while

The world lays quiet, cleansed of all its cries

and I can answer the question that pries,

"What is a smile?"

Its the array of midnight silk that lies

around perfect emerald eyes

I think I'll stay here for a while

His lips are angel's wings in disguise

and in his kiss my heart breaks free of the skies

What is a smile?

I think I'll stay here for a while

Reviews

[CharlieO]

Just a really very wonderful poem. A lovely villanelle.
I think your use of imagery is perfect - powerful and vivid. I really felt that I was soaked in the moment and in the thoughts and feelings of the narrator.
I will definately be adding this to my favourite poems from the sight. So expect more comments from me on this one.
A huge congrats on this.

[These Haunted Hallways]

Hehe, i really liked this poem. Creative with goodness, and the curiosity of what kinds of meanings are in love. Great job with this!!

B.A.

[John Stussy]

Changed, but it still is as good as it was before.

[Manda]

Amazing!
I wish I could write as amazing as you can.

[John Stussy]

Wonderfully written. A smile can be defined as quite a few different things. Not too familiar on the villanelle style, but this reads gracefully, so I will assume it is a very graceful form of poetry. Good job.