Blister me

With your gun
And your knee
You scream fun
You blister me

So I fight
So you see
That tonight
I can be

All I am
All you need
I am ram
See my speed

I hate you
This agreed
That so true
Hate exceeds

You’re confused
I guarantee
But I’m bruised
To 3rd degree

I love you
You are she
But we hate through
A blistered me

Author's Note

This to me is a fight between two lovers. The fighting hurts on both sides (physically and mentally), and though their love is strong they keep on and on knowing the effects on their emotional states. As for the ram thing it signifies stubbornness and resilience against compromise

Reviews

[Adora.xo]

This was brilliant. I see the fight, and you did a great job of portraying it in such an abstract way. The diction was very strong, and the flow was great!

With your gun
And your knee
You scream fun
You blister me

That first stanza is very strong! And it's my favourite! I think this was a brilliant poem! Great job love! Kepper up!

~Adora

[J.Black]

I really like the title of this Justin, "Blister Me" ..
Although I didn't see this a fight between two lovers, rather just a bunch of words thrown together, they did flow and rhyme very nicely. Perhaps they throw fire at one another (with all their hate) that blister me fits because it leaves scars.

[Amy Bumpas]

This poem flows very nicely together. I really don't
know what you are talking about, but it rhymes
very well.

[NinjaPi]

Your right i was confused in there. I got a bit lost in the twists of your mind. But when I found myself I understood. Wonderful poem. Really makes me ponder.

[The Wave]

Enjoyed reading through it.
Has great flow and rhythm...and the feeling is definitely clear and felt, maybe the style here made sure of that.
Overall, a good piece.

[Kanattas Atir Enomo]

this as a truly enjoyable poem to read. i like how it rhymed and how well it flowed. the words are really clear and to the point and the title really catches the reader's attention. good job.

[Jason Ellis]

This was a great way to come back.
You didn't go out with a bang, you returned with a bang.
Truly, one of my favorites.
(:

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

Love hate relationship? Or just mad love.. i like it whatever the love is and the title you blister me says so much on it's own.. really nice reading.

You’re confused
I guarantee
But I’m bruised
To 3rd degree

Love this verse.. bruised not burned..

Chloe

[Jessica]

Wow Justin Wow. This is packed with emotion and is superbly brillaint. You don't put much into your stanza but that is what makes your poems. They are beautiful and this one. Even with its cold story is brilliant. Well done. Another amazing write here. 100/100