Skye

a poem about my best friend

Skye

Ever since I first saw you Skye

You've been the apple of my eye

a beautiful girl all black and white

a cuddly bundle of fearsome delight

always glad to see me appear

jumping all over me, my clothes I fear

all covered in hairs and messy too

just as well I love clumsy you

we go to the park where I confide as I do

tell all my secrets, worries and fears to you

I know I can trust you more than any other

even more so than my sister and brother

You listen intently and give me hugs along the way

Skye, you always brighten my day

I love you more than most folk I know

 You always give me a happy glow

I'll always come see you and take you walks

I'll always love our secret wee talks

Whether in sunshine or in the fog

My best friend, my brother's wee dog

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Reviews

[Chase]

"Ill always love our secret wee talks" is my favorite line by far. I, too, harbor an unconditional and overbearing love for my dog (though yours seems to be your brother's and mine, my mom's). There is hardly a relationship more meaningful than that of a dog and its keeper.

A few small suggestions to help you increase your flow would be as follows:
-punctuation is your friend! Don't be afraid to use it, as well as capital letters at the beginning of your new sentences. I found a few times while reading this that i wasn't sure if i had started a new sentence or not and it causes pause in the flow.

-While standard structure is standard for a reason, i urge you strongly to break from tradition and write something of your own creation on the whole.

I look forward to reading more of your work (:

[KT-B]

Thanks so much for taking the time to read and review my poem, yeah Skye is my brothers dog but I go up at least 3 times a week to take her out as she has boundless energy and my bro needs a break - I appreciate your comments on punctuation, I needed that kick up the a*s. very lazy of me! best wishes :)

[Chase]

Of course! Tit for tat. I miss my girl.. Dont get to see her nearly as much as you see Skye! And youre most welcome(: we are here to grow and hone our skills!

[KT-B]

Exactly and it's fantastic to get feedback I really appreciate it - that's a shame, I miss Skye more than any humans if I go on holiday or don't see her for a few days, it's actually painful.

[Chase]

I agree. It doesnt come often though, sadly. And yes i agree wholeheartedly. Its a throb in the throat and soul.

[Kathy Van Kurin]

'Skye'
KT-B,
Sharing and friendship, oh we need it so. Trust is not something given easily. I am glad you have found it the 'black and white bundle of delight.' Your brother's dog, that is so nice for you and him I bet. Bless your sweet dogie friend. It sounds like the two of you make a really great team.
Blessings,
Kathy

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

This is the sweetest poem ever.
The best poetry sure is straight from the heart and this poem is from your heart.
This is so beautiful and heatfelt, when reading it it makes u want to say awwww .
Animals are amazing and can sometimes be much better company then humans.
I love your rhyme scheme as well.
I really really enjoyed this poem.
Great write :)

[Jade]

Such an amazing beautiful write.

[KT-B]

Thank you, she is a beautiful dog I've never loved an animal that much and sooooo clever too X