Grinning

ok so I am trying this free verse thang ...

rumour said 

there was a wise old man

living in the mountains 

beyond the clouds 

where wisdom 

is not for sale

his only possession 

a silver beard 

reaching his knees 

acting as a bridge 

from mind to heart 

thought to action

theory to practice 

encompassing all

he left his home

at an early age 

to journey

solitude as his best friend

people said he was more than

one hundred years old 

he had lived in the mountains forever

thriving on the raw air he breathed

building relationships with 

the birds, the mountain lions

the trees and the rocks

some even said they saw him converse with the sky

searching

i found him 

expecting many answers 

for my questions were many 

for many years I travelled

the arduous dirt passage 

to where he intermingled 

naturally with his earthen surrounds

high in the mountains 

beyond the clouds

whenever i visited 

he would make us 

his own special tea

which tasted much like 

the visions 

gifted before me

few words passed between us 

realising 

he held within him 

the entire universe 

causing him to grin 

every so often

i bathed in the knowledge 

he offered 

without words 

he taught me to 

live simply 

and simply live

only then would i understand

the universe has been 

within me all along 

as i had been with it

never entertaining a seperation

instead 

enveloping each other 

in love

every so often 

I find myself grinning now 

at the strangest of times

at the simplicity 

of it all

Author's Note

ok ok ok .... you know where I am at ... so your honesty is appreciated so I can learn and dance within the words a little longer :)

LOVE LOVE LOVE

Reviews

[Marie]

That is what it all comes down to: simplicity. I believe those who can lived in the simplest way are the happiest. I'm not one.

[KWP]

I love your honesty Marie, you make me smile :) I am becoming more simple each and every day ... it's quite refreshing x x

[Perdition]

I believe I know this man well and not only does he speak to the sky but he weaves stars into his eyes and smiles the language of the sea. The dirt road is but a coat that must be discarded from our own weary travels in order to come into his counsel pure. It is a fine place for receiving the breath of Gaia and your words have captured this well. There is a bright aura that surrounds it. I am glad that you have chosen this endeavor of free verse. It suits you well. No critique other than fine praise for the sun tiller.

[KWP]

you have given me reason to smile, you have captured the meaning as I knew you would ... thank you my friend for taking the time to offer your thoughts ... they just allow the sun to shine brighter today x x

[Frieda P]

First off, what do you mean 'trying'....this is fantabulous, although a bit long, but you do love your words so... ;) You wanted me to be honest. Simple pleasures, like poetry... Love ya Betty!

[KWP]

yes yes you know me .. we Aussies have much to say .. love a good chat too .. your honesty makes me smile ... thanks chick chick ... love ya right back Pumpkin Pie x x

[Frieda P]

Takes one BIG mouth to know another. ;) Mwah! x

[A. Amos]

Live simply and simply live, I love the message and your poetic story...marvelous!

[KWP]

thank you sunshine x x

[Einstein Noodle]

i love the content .. (i am a consummate introvert) so inside lay all my challenges :) love the story .. the ease of the read .. very much like prose well done .. i like it .. wouldn't change a thing .. check this song out .. i think you may like it .. maybe even post it with your poem
http://youtu.be/ToEPFDIzhNA

E.

[KWP]

Hey I love that song :) i am finding out more about you ... I am an introvert as well, which is a funny paradox as I had a cafe that served over 800 people daily ... i love the solitude , I love the magic when I stop and notice something in nature and say 'oh wow I am so lucky to be me'

thank you so much for reading I do appreciate your feedback very much and serves as a strength to forge ahead with new tools xx

[Daydreamer]

Came across this by chance xD #news feed
and just wanted to say, you're gorgeous ♥
I apologize for the invasion,though xx
but I highly appreciate beauty xx

[KWP]

Hey Manal, no invasion here beautiful gal, more the merrier I say ... oh hang on I am an introvert, I keep forgetting that ... perhaps I am just an 'aspiring introvert' I still love people too much !! hahaha... ... thanks for reading chick ... no rhymes again!! I am not sure whats happenin' in ma brain just now x x ;D

[Daydreamer]

Hahahahah, I meant I loved your comment! That's why I have put down a comment rather than a review xD I haven't actually read the poem tbh, sorry :P

[KWP]

well go and read it then girl :D .... please x x

[Daydreamer]

I need your footprints in my tiny poetic world,chick ;) x x
Shall do x x

[Im His Daughter]

this was great.. keep it up.. very visual & thought evoking...

[KWP]

oh hello and nice to meet you .. thanks for stopping by appreciate your thoughts x x

[diaphanous]

Beautiful and simple. I feel more at peace for having read this.

[KWP]

ahhh thank you .. that is so lovely to hear :) LOVE xx

[jacob erin-cilberto]

a little long for me...but i want to meet this man....simple is so good, so refreshing...

i had thoughts of Jeremiah Johnson...and when i saw that, i wanted to drop all my civilization garb...and head for the mountains and start over..with simple...the answers to life...

live with the land...like the native americans did before we came here and shoved them on to reservations.

your free verse is thoughtful, rhythmic and with just the right amount of abstract.

[KWP]

we cannot all condense the myriad of thoughts into six or eight lines like you do so well Jacob :) anyway I have much to say ... hahaha

saying that I do understand I need to refine and get to the point a little quicker ... slowly slowly eh ..

thank you for reading sunshine ... she says carrying a small rope tied pack into the hills .... x x

[jacob erin-cilberto]

see you up there, KWP!

[KWP]

I will have the tea ready for your arrival x x