Cotton Candy (Written together with Richard Allen Beevor )

another fun little get together with Richard .. hehe xx

I had a dream this morning,

we were at the fair,

you were full of cotton candy

even in your hair.

You always tell me of your dreams

Forever chasing after me

I do not care for you courting

Why can't you let me be

My heart is your candy

so sweet upon your lips

my hands caressed your body

and rested on your hips

Again you try the romance 

Romance is not my thing 

rest you hands where you like my friend

Watch my hands - cos they can sting

I bought you cotton candy

even gave you a red rose

but when i want a little kiss

all i get is a bloody nose

How can I say this nicely

I loathe you with distaste

now take your damn Cotton Candy 

and please my time don't waste

alas my cotton candy

now scattered on the floor

my love my heart has broken

and thrown me out the door

my love lies with your brother 

so strong and big and tall 

instead of offering me cotton candy 

he offers large body parts and all 

Large! please don't make me laugh

his name in town is titch

you been playing with his parts?

but what about his itch!!

I say jealousy it is a curse

and one I do not find manly 

I shall take the titch, his itch and fitch 

but not take your rotten candy!

Reviews

[willweb]

This was fun and funny. Once again a nice collaboration both of you.

[NoelHC]

A humorous joint effort by both of you.

[Matching Socks]

Haha! Nice job you guys!

[Sindu]

You had me laughing hard for sometime!!! Poor guy doesn't get a break..haha
That's a given when you have siblings with large body parts and all lol
Thank go for one thing: it is not all sweet gooeyness like cotton candy.. more of like a very sour berry
Nice job both of you. Thanks for not giving me diabetis. You both make some weirdly good duo.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

dark humor, delivered with a tongue-in-cheek smile...

love the ending...the story is really cool, the game of tag between the two...come here come here come here then get away get away get away...maybe more like a tug of war of emotions.

good job you two.

[KWP]

hey Jacob thanks so much - it was fun xx

[Maglia Weaver Twill]

What can I say about it, almost a parody t'were it not pounding me with its corporal esteem...
I really enjoyed reading it, and am worried that if I don't egg you on I might not get another of the likes of it

I would like to give you a favorite line but I like all the lines and they seem crucial to the overarching message. But I like for instance "How can I say this nicely/I loathe you with distaste/" even though it's mean nothing short of my own demise makes me not like the loathing, which declarative statement cannot be true whatever, for once loathed what does it mean to not truly believe we are loathed, oh the loth but need, such rags...

et cetera, et cetera, et cetera....

[KWP]

hehehe - why thank you for reading Magila - t'was a fun ditty - Richard seems to bring out the feisty in me ;)

[R Smith]

and the violence, don't forget my bloody nose!!! haha