Contagion

The grace of a sky extending, 

the hills, not yet mountains, 

wending towards the illusion 

of a landscape, wild waters  

you first accompanied me to 

the night the moon turned blue.

In the room’s corner shadows played 

in harmony, as if oblivious, 

to the hungry nature of wolves.

How often I’ve said I love you to a ewe,

without ever meaning it, but 

yesterday, I seemed to recall, 

the distinct flavor of a change 

in the seasons opening up in front of us, 

as though the contagion of each 

other’s appetites settled the question:

the promise of a sunset is this morning’s dawn.

Ken e Bujold

Reviews

[D. Mansfield]

"the illusion of a landscape" I liked that alot. very good poem, thank you

[Chris Shaw]

I sense a change of attitude here. Ewes are sheep. Sheep follow the crowd, This one is different. There is mutual hunger and I see this one lasting. The opening lines gave me a skyscape of moving cloud. Nice. You are very quiet at the moment Ken. Not writing as much?

Chris

[Ken e Bujold]

am chris. looking to bring out a collection in the spring, so at moment it is mostly revisions etc of the works to be included. occasional new one to post here, but book is by times a slow grind

[Chris Shaw]

Pleased to hear you are busy on your book. Something to look forward to.

[Betty Hermelee]

Ewe and you, but I'm not sure you really meant you love a ewe, just fooling us you do have a love that changes as the seasons change...the contagion of love between the two is important to the poem....it opens up sensual feelings and creates a bond. The appetites get stronger, hunger for each other.....under a blue moon...
Nice!
Best, B

[W. Barrett Munn]

At first I thought the syntax lines 4, 5, 6 a little clunky but looking closer I think it is a matter of punctuation , that is, to me.
Have you considered it like this. Line one ends with em dash. Elide the next two commas and end with a semicolon after lanscape. In my mind the effect is this: first line with a strong pause followed by a rush of words to another pause, not quite as severe, followed by wild waters.

To my way of thinking there is more musicality that way. Your thoughts?

Winston

[Ken e Bujold]

probably. though at moment not sure if this is to be included in volume or not, so be a while b4 i circle back to it.

[willweb]

I must say, this one has me scratching my head and not only because it itches but for the web you have woven in this tale of shadows and wolves and love for you and ewe to be finalized by the sunset disguising itself as the dawn. I'll bet that has the horizon confused. really cool my friend, a bit abstract, which I like.

[Ken e Bujold]

thanks will. bit of abstraction is good for the scalp

[Lisasview]

Good morning Ken
Wonderful to read your most interesting poem.
I have not been on the Cafe for over 5 long weeks as I have been quite ill.
It is wonderful to be back reading and reviewing.
I have missed that and of course writing and posting.
Your poem seems to be about love. And, what is love all about. I really enjoyed rereading your words several times before reviewing. Your words “how many times have I said….
Really moved me…
Lisa, now feeling so much better… in Spain

[Ken e Bujold]

nice to have you vack Lisa, and to hear you are feeling better. happy new year

[Lisasview]

Happy New Year Ken,
Plan to post new poems soon.
Not sure you have read the ones I posted before I got sick?😍