The Beginning of the End

The Beginning of the End

A Chapter by Alex Vidmar

It came from the depths of Hell,
Rising and inhabiting the corpses.
Freshly dead ones only, strangely enough.
Loved ones came back, hungry and relentless.

At first no-one did a thing,
Fear and surprise stunned us all.
'Til the first living human died of a bite,
Then the crows began to sing.

We holed ourselves up in basements and schools,
Made weapons from scratch of old gard'ning tools.
Some left for other parts of Earth,
Just to escape this Hell-spawned birth.

We all lost family, friends, and hope.
Many took their own lives; unable to cope.
These undead spirits from beyond the graves,
Forced me to take refuge in an old bear's cave.

Lord Almighty, what the f**k have we done?
To walk, sleepless, forced to run?
Running from family, newly forgotten.
To save our own lives, however ill-gotten.

I've had to put to rest,
My wife and my kids,
And my parents still walk, shot in the chests.
Lord, please tell me what the f**k we did!

I hear one coming my way now.
Gotta go.


© 2012 Alex Vidmar


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not when i'm listening to scary music along with this *shivers* damn you 28 days later! anyway awesome beginning! i loved the title! and people get mad when i say things are just starting! never ending hmmm maybe they felt horrible that it was indeed the end, oh well XD

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A very strong beginning to this story. I like the use of poetry to give the story a good pace and some history. A excellent chapter. I shall keep reading.
Coyote

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Warren, You were right. I'm very inspired by "The Devil Wears Prada" 's Album "Zombie LP" Thank you for noticing :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


Nice, it reminded me of a song by some guys called "The Devil Wears Prada" I don't know if you were inspired by them. Good piece.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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I really love this. The story line just mesmerized me and held me captive. Nice work. This piece has a wonderful flow to it ^-^

Posted 12 Years Ago


omg, this was more interesting than i imagined :D
though it isnt my fav subject but this one keeps me tensed!
moving to chapter two :D

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Nice poem and I liked how you stuck in all the apocalypse stuff ;) Kinda reminds me of MOTD and HOTD if you ask me...You explained everything about how the apocalypse began to how you felt to the present when you were fighting. You could clearly visualize what was going on at the time. Awesome write ^(*.*)^

Posted 12 Years Ago


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A wonderfully spun treat for these eyes to behold.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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A strong poem that shows the fear and desperation in which people would live their lives if zombies came back. I love the way that you used imagery and specific words to describe the zombies without actually saying it. Great write.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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This is one of the best poems I've read in a while. Very cool topic to write about. I like how you not once said "zombie". I like poems that are so clear that you don't have to state the obvious. Thanks for sharing.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Awesome, clear and perfect imagery even without flowery language, especially the end. You're great at writing in the characters veiw!

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