Let Go Of My Hand

Let me free. Let me be.

You cant keep tying me to this tree.

Im not that little kid any more.

You cant keep locking me behind this door. 

I know the world, seen with my own eyes. 

Sooner or later, everybody dies. 

I know to be safe, I know not to be tricked.

Its it necessary to really be this strict?

Im not a bad person, I have common sense.

What is the reason for this big metal fence?

Cant protect me forever, I have to soon live. 

Without some more knowledge i'll have nothing to give. 

I can make my own choices, like friends work and cash.

By locking me down, the quicker ill dash.

You must give me some freedom, some leash and some space.

I am my own person, this you must face.

You make me want to leave and never come back.

Always have a bag in the corner, readily packed. 

If i am gone one morning, I hope you understand.

Its only because you wouldn't let go of my hand. 

Reviews

[Antonio Chevere]

Very straight foward poem that speaks to posibly anyone who reads it. I enjoyed it alot

[Devons]

A nice balance between meaning, feeling, structure and rhyme. So often with pieces like this it is so easy for people to sound adolescent and bitter --but this poem stays above all that and makes its point very effectively; poetically, and with intelligence.
"Without some more knowledge I'll have nothing to give."
Great line.
A smart, bright and insightful piece of writing.

[The Great Nothing]

A piece that has a lot of imagery, and like a lot of your writing I can relate to. The only critique I can think to throw in is don't be afraid to mix it up more. I know you like rhyming, and I'm glad that it works. For me I seek a more subtle course. Push past the formats and past your own mind. Find a place in the middle and then you'll be sublime. :D Sorry got into a little bit of a groove there, but hopefully you'll know what I mean. Feel free to ask questions if you've got them, and to peek a view at what I have brewing on my page. Much love for your skills.

[Tim]

I'm sure there are so many that can identify with this poem. Young or even older. Good one. 100/100

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this is so sad but written ever so well.
Your rhyme scheme is spot on. Love this write!

[Bonnie Hines]

I really like the line "By locking me down, the quicker i'll dash". Its totally sums up the entire over protective parenting conflicts that parents have with their kids. The harder they try to mold their kids, the more their kids resent them.

[Steve]

This write is so sad and a little heartwrenching....

But I love the poetry! It sounds great and is easy to read.