What Are You Living For?

A poem I made up about a girl who wasted her life

I met a young woman around my age...
She had the biggest smile && dreams you could only picture in your mind.

We became good friends...
Although she was different, I was too kind...

To just push her away like her other friends && family...
It was impossible for my friend to endure.

Soon she turned to drugs && illegal money to hide her pain...
... I asked, "What are you living for?"

No reply.. I tried reminding her of the dreams she once cherished.
She gave no listening ear..

Selling drugs.. Getting mixed with the wrong people...
She lived life with no fear.

There were days I looked at her helplessly....
I knew I couldn't help anymore.

She was introduced to prostitutes...
.... I asked, "What are you living for?"

She responded "I feel safe && loved by the people I am around."
Her heart had been sore.

I explained "you have me.. && They don't DESERVE your attention."
... What are you living for?

So many times I begged her to hang that act up...
Because with God, she could start over.

Then... there was alcohol..
Impossible for her to remain sober.

It never stopped me from remaining her friend...
I was the only one who cared.

She was thinking suicide was the answer...
&& for her, I was scared.

She called me... dramatically...
saying she was ready to die.

I SCREAMED...! As loud as I could...
"God has something planned for you... Now is not your time!"

She laughed as though I was crazy...
&& the sound of an engine roar.

"You're drunk... Aren't you?" I asked...
With no hope in my veins...
... I asked "What are you dying for?"

Ladie NiQue

Reviews

[biggerthenu]

i like how you flipped it towards the ending nice write thanks for sharing

[KatiePie]

This was extremely well constructed. Really good write, I love the way you describe things because even though you barely use sensory details I could still see each event flowing through my mind perfectly, like a reeling movie.
The way it ended just took my breath away and let me shocked.
Beautiful. Amazing. Wonderful
I loved it
-Cathrine

[Dutch Jr.]

A really well written piece!! I really liked the prose storytelling element of this poem. A really good write.

[Antonio Valentino]

Whew! What a build up. The ending pushed some mist out towards my eyes.

I don't know what more to say except that I loved it!
Antonio

[1heartpub]

I enjoy your prose, Nique...and though I'm not an aficianado on poetry, I realize that you have room to grow. This story has depth and personal attachment to me...it would seem that you have many personal and extra personal details that can only be unleashed from the soul onto the paper. Very good. I'd like to see some work from your novel as well. I'll send you a review request so you can take a look at one of my earlier works. The story is decent, but I've matured as a writer and become stronger in verse since then. Anyway, a very good offering, I think.