Please forgive me....

Please forgive me....

A Poem by Levioshock
"

This is dedicated to someone I hurt

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You came back

I was so excited

Exponentially delighted

 

You told me how you were

I listened with delight

Your smile looked so bright

 

We talked for many hours

Dreaming of the day

We would meet and together go away

 

We would go to the beach

Talk and talk

Walk and walk

 

I never want to let you go

Please don’t leave

It would be hard to breathe

 

I know I screwed up

I made a mistake

Now all I want to do is stay awake

 

I want to talk to you

But alas I wait for your return

So that I can express my love and total concern

 

Please forgive me

That is all I ask

I hope I can live up to your task

© 2010 Levioshock


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A great write. the beginning really put a smile on my face. what hope, joy, so innocent. loved it.

Posted 14 Years Ago


We learn too late what is worthwhile in a life. Poem tells a story of wishes and hope for better words and ending. Forgiveness is necessary. For our soul too. A outstanding poem.
Coyote

Posted 14 Years Ago


Very nice, I hope you're forgiven!

Posted 14 Years Ago


i love the way your lines rhymed, beautiful write

Posted 14 Years Ago


This is very sweet and very nice rhyming. I hate it when I fall asleep while talking to someone I care about then you can't stop apologizing. Great write

Posted 14 Years Ago


beautiful and amazing in every way. i loved it :)

Posted 14 Years Ago


Woooah! This is beautiful. It' very nice and heart-felt. Loved it.

Posted 14 Years Ago


Catchy first stanza. Also, an introspective narrator. Like he's saying it to himself. Very good.

Posted 14 Years Ago


This is really good. Incredibly emotional... I can feel that it came from your heart.

Posted 14 Years Ago


Very wonderful and emotional piece

Posted 14 Years Ago



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Levioshock
Levioshock

Copley, OH



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