The Seven Deadly Sins

The seven deadly sins

I make sure to exhibit them all

With sloth I relax

And take the time to care for myself

Greed keeps me from wasting my money

And pushes me to earn more

Anger keeps me strong

And prevents others from walking all over me

With lust comes the pleasure of men

And I keep myself satisfied

With gluttony I can taste every country

And experience sweet and savory

Envy drives me to do better

Until I win what I want

And pride does the most for me

It helps me stand up straight

In the face of danger

And helps me battle

Those who aim to harm me

Pride keeps me tall

When the safest thing would be to fall

Reviews

[Jade]

It helps me stand up straight
In the face of danger
And helps me battle
Those who aim to harm me
Pride keeps me tall
When the safest thing would be to fall


KEEP ON STANDING up for your beliefs....
This is so well said and so well stressed outward.
I really like this write, nicely presented

[The Iron Horseman]

I really liked this. I don't know whether it was your intent, but it made me smile. I love the way you thumb your nose at all the moralistic hypocrites by turning their supposed sins into virtues. And I particularly agree with your final one - pride. No one is anything without pride in his or her self! Very nicely done.

[Coyote Poetry]

Easy to know the seven deadly sins. When sin is a part of us. No return to being clean. I enjoyed your words and thoughts. Left something for the reader to ponder.
Coyote

[Wesley Dingler]

A thousand applause. This is brilliant, Lexi.
Not only is it great poetry and form, but the message displays that, well, even sin is all in how you look at a thing. I will certainly push people to read this.
It's that well-done.

[Askew]

Thank you so much Wesley, you have no idea how grateful I am to hear that!

[Wesley Dingler]

You're welcome so much. I really enjoyed this piece.

*thumbs up

[Dave]

From your perspective who can truly look upon these as sins? They look more like the pillars that one needs to build a strong stable life. Good for you!

Take care - Dave

[Einstein Noodle]

i love this unique creative take on those 7 deadlies ... and your poem drives home what our sin is ... believing and acting on a corruption of something virtuous ..well done ... biting satire ... your speaker sounds like a very self confident rebel ... gotta love it!
E.

[Chris Shaw]

I enjoyed the approach to your lines here. Turning negatives into positives is a definite positive in my book. Anyone who can do that certainly has a great attitude to life. Is likely to overcome life's adversities. Well penned.

Chris

[Chryiss]

What an interesting take on the seven 'deadly' sins. I really liked how you turned what typically is considered negative into a positive just as one might turn 'a bad situation into a good one.' It reinforces the idea that life is about perspective and attitude, to make the best and learn from everything.
But in following the classic take on the sins, the ending was a nice touch as it added that vulnerability despite efforts to be optimistic.

[Phill Oz O'fee]

The ‘seven’ contrary virtues, which are specific opposites to the ‘Seven Deadly Sins’ could be listed as: Humility against pride, Kindness against envy, Abstinence against gluttony, Chastity against lust, Patience against anger, Liberality against greed, and Diligence against sloth. However, your poetical integration of the 'deadly' into a lifestyle, positive twisting, and interpretation is a great read. Made me smile ... nice one! :-)