Decayed Wings

Decayed Wings

A Poem by Lexi Askew

He asked me if it hurt when I fell from heaven
And it wasn't a charming question
My wings were set ablaze
As I crashed through the Earth's atmosphere
Each feather plucked with painstaking vulgarity
I grasped at moons and galaxies
In a desperate attempt
To slow my blazing descent
And the burns still smoke
My scarred back still smoldering 
There went my ignorant purity
As a gritty harsh reality was thrust upon me

"You should know. 
You pushed me."

© 2019 Lexi Askew


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Congratulations you got a place

Posted 5 Months Ago


Lexi, well done thanks so much for this in my poetry competition loved it

Posted 5 Months Ago


Another out of the closet of anger and hurt caused by a man. It flows well and the ending is quite revealing as the protagonist felt pushed rather than falling because of a relationship break down?

Posted 7 Months Ago


I am no very eloquent, just loved the poem,

Posted 8 Months Ago


This is such a powerful piece you wrote here.
I love the way you start the intro. with a cliche phrase men very often use, thinking that they are charming and sleek, as a pick up line to get into a woman's knickers:
'He asked me if it hurt when I fell from Heaven'

Then using the spiritual, divine connotation of that phrase, in reference to the biblical Fall of Man from Heaven, you completely turn the cliche on its head by tackling and outlining the serious ramification of such 'fall', as the poem grasps and transports the reader to another metaphysical dimension:
'My wings were set ablaze
as I crashed through the Earth's atmosphere,
each feather plucked with painstaking vulgarity,
I grasped at moons and galaxies
in a desperate attempt
to slow my blazing descent...'

From that first line, which is a cheesy and cliche line, you take us all into the approximate truth of our general fall whose effects still affect us to this very day.

Then you sum it up with these words:
''You should know.
you pushed me.''
And thus, the first introduction line and the last two lines completely complement each other, making the poem whole in concept, content and context, with such simplicity and depth and picturesque imagery.

This is a very beautiful, truthful and urgent poem that commands automatic respect.

You certainly should follow your dreams of becoming full fledged teacher and published author.
I am a fan of yours already, with only the first poem of yours that I just read.

YOU ARE A GENIUS THE WORLD WILL KNOW ABOUT.
PLEASE KEEP YOUR ESSENCE AND DON'T LET THE FAME CHANGE YOU.

Posted 9 Months Ago


Lexi Askew

9 Months Ago

I am so glad you appreciated this poem, I put a lot of effort into creating a certain atmosphere aro.. read more
I dig this, makes me think of resurrection and s**t hahah

Posted 9 Months Ago


The last two lines are a real punch in the gut right at the end which makes it so much more powerful.

Posted 9 Months Ago


Sounds like that fall even from heaven

Posted 9 Months Ago


oh my goodness, Lexi! such brilliant and exquisite pain and fall ... sheesh! lots of layers in this one says i .. and universal for sure ... all religions have one explanation or another as to our sinful core ;( few have a realistic solution says i! your closing is killer after such a brutal ride ... man! i hardly dare ask "Is it I?" ... real fine poetry for me!
E.

Posted 9 Months Ago



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Lexi Askew
Lexi Askew

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