I Am The Sun

I Am The Sun

A Poem by Karina Longo

Freedom of speech

is a mere excuse to make a Hitler

sound like Jesus -

everything that in reality

would never be quite real.

 

No one is heard

If they say a word

It disappears within the fog

Along with despair

and little drops of rain 

Right from the eye -

it vanishes with care.

 

Set me free because free will is a lie

Pardon God, pardon me Holy Christ

But I want to be happy

and yet

I'm not.

 

Paint my nails black like a dead

and voluptuous flower

My eyes blink a couple of times

while I look at you

Cat's eyes, they say

They don't trust anyone -

Eyes of the girl afraid.

 

Dye my hair the most vibrant red

I am fire, I want to be the sun

You can look but you can't touch

You can love but you can't reach

It's just another morning star

that some hate

and some fear.

 

You get used to it

Like with the

moon

breeze

water

and fresh air.

 

Beauty for eternity

Sunrise burns your eyes

Eternally beautiful and unseen

Natural elegant death -

 

End of the day

Astonishing sunset

and then

the night eats me out,

Over and over again

I'll be waiting for my

Next decay.

© 2011 Karina Longo


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To restrict freedom of speech in fear of another Hitler rising to power would also strip the voices of those who are the opposite. This is the price of freedom that each individual has to be wise enough to discern the good from the bad and chose wisely who to listen too and who to ignore. Every day the world tries to strip more freedoms away rather if it is religion who wants to force us to believe this or that, or force governments to in act laws to remove our choice to live as we want. It's funny but some of the most accepting and diverse people I know don't were their religion on their arm like a badge of power. Humble is the key word and not many people know humility especially the religious. Great write.

Posted 11 Years Ago


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even the Sun rises each and every day bringing those new beginnings...continuosly...nice poetic work...

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

you're very good..

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

"Set me free because free will is a lie
Pardon God, pardon me Holy Christ
But I want to be happy
and yet
I'm not."
You had me from the first line. The truth can be brutal. Your words are true and to the point. No weakness in this powerful poem. I had to read a few times. A outstanding poem. Thank you.
Coyote

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

It's truly amazing how many people strive to speak their minds about so much, yet only a handful gets heard. I guess it shows that no matter how loud we scream our lungs out, there is no echo at the end of our words we make. Great piece!

M.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

You continue to make me speechless. Amazing job!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A very powerful expression of your views. I can't say I agree completely, especially since this is freedom of speech, but in truth, that doesn't really matter. I love this piece for being so outspoken and not fearing offending others. That's what every poem should be, completely honest without worrying endlessly about protecting others from your views, whatever they may be. I also love that this comes from an obviously well-educated woman. Your elevated diction and consistent style suggest you aren't a newcomer to poetry. You have a clear stance, an obvious style, and a steady rhyme scheme. This tidy set-up contrasts the untidy ideas presented, but in a good way. You come across angry, but level-headed and clear in yor psychology of life. Your metaphores are well-thought out and not without support. There is an artistry to your argument that adds a rhythm and eloquence and I very much enjoyed reading it. Thank you for sharing it with me and don't stop writing with abandon.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I checked out some of your writing, and I have to say, what impressed me the most is your imagery. It is so imaginative and descriptive. I can definitely see where you get your influence from; I see a lot of Plath in this. What I also love is no matter how theraputic a piece of writing may be for you, you still manage to find creative ways to express how you feel.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

It sounds like you are upset with the way life is turning out.It often isnt fair it often is cruel but you need not become jaded over the majorities plight be the one be the one!!!

Posted 11 Years Ago


Teach me how to write like this! This is amazing work. I love how the elements flow together. You have a very nice rhythm going on.

"Dye my hair the most vibrant red
I am fire, I want to be the sun
You can look but you can't touch
You can love but you can't reach
It's just another morning star
that some hate
and some fear."

Love this line. My absolute favorite!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Karina Longo

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