What Have I Become

I wrote this straight from the heart, no fake emotions.

What have I become 

but the one to break my heart,

I climb so high

just to fall apart.

You'd think I'd know by now

to stop allowing pain,

but when I'm my only friend

then what is there to gain?

My heart is wrapped in barbs 

pressed against my  soul,

so every time it beats

shatters a new and deeper hole.  

I've hurt myself before

to see if I was dead,

but life poured out of me

that thick and golden red.

I write these songs of sadness

so I can cry at night,

I try to withstand the pain

but it's always a constant fight.

What have I become 

but the one to break my heart,

I climb so high

just to fall apart.

Reviews

[Fallen Angel]

wow i am speechless! this is a great write and i could really relate to it! As ussual it was a pleasure reading your work =)

[Bhavya Kaushik]

Great work here, I think so that I can make a beautiful song lyrics as well :)

[Senseless whatever]

Great write! Strong emotions can't be hidden. Fantastic self examination. I can relate to this piece. Just awesome work here.

[Blue]

Wow this is a great poem! Has a lot of power in this! It's really great.

[Erin_is_peace]

This peice has alot of meaning and power to it. Not many people are willing to face this. I'm glad that someone has what it takes to write something like this :)

[Katie]

I love the repeat of stanza one, this is such a powerful emotional piece. amazing!

[Scarlet Pulse]

Wow, that poem is powerful. And full of emotions. My favorite stanza is the third stanza. There's just detail, and imagery, and i really felt what you were getting at, through your words. Great job.

[MissWordSmith]

powerful.. as usual.. your words have that magical element to them.. the simplicity and the way they wow me.. !
great job!

This is excellent. A very powerful poem that really cuts to the bone. Great job.

[An owl on the moon]

So powerfully emotional, filled with a bitterness and pain... Feel so much hurt and loneliness wrapped around you... and within... A glimpse inside a heart that is deeply moving...