Golden Leaf

A golden leaf atop an autumn tree
Falls down to meet me
A blade of sharp-cut grass

So caring she is
She inspires me to be better
Strokes my ego
Or does she just see greatness within

I love her gaze
Her stares how she loves me
With her whole being

Her brain, eyes, toes, lips
Her heart, ribs, belly, hips
And long smooth limbs
Like a tree slowly growing towards a light

She sees

Gorgeous soul with her words I will not try to compete
She uses them so well
A master of speech
That earns her keep to speak
For those whose wallets are full
But their energy is too weak

I want to love her like Led Zeppelin songs and Marvin Gaye tunes alike
I want to give her the love she shows me
Her friendship and her desire she holds
Deep in her womb
I appreciate her so much

Reviews

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Aaaww...this was beautifully written. I especially liked:

I want to love her like Led Zeppelin songs and Marvin Gaye tunes alike --great line!

You have poetic chops, my friend. I like when you write from the heart; it's honest and bright at the same time. I sense angst as well as hopefulness, which I find to be the two best feelings to infuse in one piece at the same time.

This shows your versatility. No whips or chains here, just purity. :)

[Luke L]

thank you very much. I don't like purity though. It's too pure, I'd prefer something that feels rawer, something that requires effort and thought, but still with edges :)

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Purity requires effort, are you kidding??? Personally, I think that purity is the hardest emotion to capture, because everything else must be stripped away...you're standing there naked in front of a room full of people and saying "this is who I am, pure and honest". At least that's how I see it. Edgy is good, but purity is difficult. :)

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

*Purity doesn't require effort, are you kidding me??? Mistyping...

[Luke L]

oh I get it... you're saying purity as in honesty? Right? I took you meaning moreso perfection... I think I get what you mean now

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

:)

[SuzieQ]

For some reason the songs "Dazed and Confused" and "Ain't no sunshine when she's gone" keep playing in my mind. I do love this poem Luke!!

[SuzieQ]

Wonderful writing Luke!! I really love this! You're ego should be stroked to remind you of your greatness within! You are an amazing person and an amazing writer!

[Luke L]

thank you :)

[Jessica Gillitzer]

This has to be my fav. so far. I am a sucker for love though. i can't believe this is from the same guy who did the hiker, omg this is freaking awesome. ooh, i liked this line very much.
Gorgeous soul with her words I will not try to compete
She uses them so well
A master of speech
That earns her keep to speak
i didn't quite get the next two lines though. I kinda thought it made her sound like a gold digger. the whole of this poem is emotional and deep.
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Jessie ToT

[Luke L]

ha naw I wasn't calling her a golddigger it's that she's a ghostwriter. Thank you very much Jessie

[Jessica Gillitzer]

No prob I look forward to more of these when you feel the urge.
=)

[Luke L]

one day :p

[Lover Of Words]

Very good sir

[Luke L]

thank you miss :)

[Lover Of Words]

Your welcome sir