Denim Bottle Collector

Man I'm a lonely

Lonely boy

Keep me company

I can't afford any toys

Bags of bottles I carry

Jangling is so much noise

Welfare check doesn't cut it

I need my gut filled

Amazing to see

How I get fat on scraps

I guess pig feed is cheap

I take naps

Can't really get to sleep

My curly grey wool

Isn't made of sheep

So let me sit around

With instant noodles

Found friendship on tv

And I'm up and down this elevator

Up and down this ride

I wish it would stop

I can't get on my feet

And I'm up and down this elevator

Up and down this ride

I wish it would stop

I can't get on my feet

Reviews

[Zero_Edge88]

Ah, the feels on this is so despondent and so reeling that when we look at a person's life and think we're never going to be them somehow we crawl slowly into becoming that person unknowingly. Its reality at its intoxicating monotony in a way this cycle is so vicious that it's deadly! Someone said that if we think that taking an adventure is too risky then having a routine is deadlier! We ought to confide not only with ourselves but with the way that when tomorrow comes we won't be another Sisyphus, Prometheus or some couch potato on another apartment. So deadly and so sad that it reminds me that even hamsters know when to stop spinning on their wheels and just go out to have some food and water then run around to be with their family. That's what it should feel like.

Sent by Miss Pryde here and yes this was a sad but beautiful piece no matter. :)

[Luke L]

thank you for the review sir. I will try to listen to my inner hamster :)

[Jack...]

So very sad, this state of affairs that allows people to live on the street, begging for scraps as the Mercedes and Lexus drive by without even noticing. Very nicely penned, just very sad.

[Luke L]

well this particular person was just on welfare and collected bottles, but he had a home, but ya I see what you're saying, thanks for the review

[Sami Khalil]

A powerful write on hopelessness. Splendid...:)

[Luke L]

thank you man, I am trying to write more observational and story oriented pieces at this point, thanks for the review

[Sami Khalil]

Good to know...You are welcome...:)

[Pryde Foltz]

It breaks my heart that anyone lives this way. You pen this state of hopelessness and tragic loneliness simply but poignantly. Wow!

[Luke L]

it was inspired by this one guy I see in my building regularly