The law calls you my mother

The law calls you my mother

A Poem by Lyndsay Castro
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about an in-law

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Icy icy fingers, grasping at my throat

Cutting off my air supply, braying like a goat

 

I'm standing in your shadow, swallowed up in black

Hollow tree you're killing me, throwing me off track

 

Trendils creeping in my throat and threatening to kill

Give me up eternally, for your own cheap thrill

 

Making me non-exsistant, you howl like a dog and appear on all four

But laughing at me constantly while you weave your lore

 

copywrite 2008 Lyndsay Castro

© 2008 Lyndsay Castro


Author's Note

Lyndsay Castro
I was going to add a photo, but it isn't deserved by the subject

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You captured the realtionship in one sentence..."Making me non-exsistant, you howl like a dog and appear on all four". I love how you interpet the in-law for all to see. Sometimes you wonder if certain people are human? I am glad I came across your writing @ 2am. I look forward for more. Please when you get a chance grace me with your presence and offer me honest feedback. Thanks in advance.



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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Those in-laws man I guess theirs one or more in every family. This is deep though I've
never seen the subject done so cleanly and at the same time it's dark. I really liked
this, and man I feel for you sometimes you have to make it a goal to stay far away
from family and keep all forced calls under two minutes......not that I would know
or anything just suggesting! Great poem.

Posted 12 Years Ago


You captured the realtionship in one sentence..."Making me non-exsistant, you howl like a dog and appear on all four". I love how you interpet the in-law for all to see. Sometimes you wonder if certain people are human? I am glad I came across your writing @ 2am. I look forward for more. Please when you get a chance grace me with your presence and offer me honest feedback. Thanks in advance.



Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like this - the title definitely makes it come home

forMARZly yours

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

wow take it you and the in laws on not so good terms? Good poem though!

Posted 12 Years Ago


Wow this is so amazing!!!
My fav line:
"Making me non-exsistant, you howl like a dog and appear on all four
But laughing at me constantly while you weave your lore"
Well done!!


Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

It is good, nice job. I get thrown off sometimes by each of the lines. It could be just me but there doesnt seem to a specific rhythm throughout the whole poem. I just mean I dont feel the rhythm in the poem, other that that it was good, nice use of words and so on.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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I like it. Good job! Thank you for sharing. Debileah

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Lyndsay Castro
Lyndsay Castro

Houston, TX



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