Under Pressure

Under Pressure

A Poem by Lyndsay Castro
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A different kind of pressure

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So hard to push this pain away

It swells in waves too hard to bear

My effort and my nerves are frayed

I long for when I had no cares

 

But now I'm under pressure, pain

My hands shake and sweat and try

To forget the time when I had gained

And never lost, the time I could fly

 

The sun shines through my window, bright

Yet my souls migraine turns away

Why can't I shrug off my small plight?

I can't ignore this pain today

 

 

 

copywrite 2008 Lyndsay Castro

© 2008 Lyndsay Castro


Author's Note

Lyndsay Castro
A bad Fibromyalgia day.

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I was just searching around and discovered this wonderful piece of art. I really enjoyed the pace and the journey you took us through that day. I look forward to reading more of your honesty. Thanks you for sharing and come find me on this site. Your writing has inspired.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I agree with Dionysus. I feel you pushing one way and than other. It felt like there may have been two poems combined in this one. Nice write and yes, a very interesting read.

Posted 12 Years Ago


alot of direction in this poem, interseting read.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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this is such a good poem. it has so much emotion and makes you really think about it. well done :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Amazing!!!
Your expresion of pain is great!!
I couldn't feel the pain you feel of corus because no one can unless they've been there but I can feel that there is huge pain!!
Great write!!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Good job! I really like it. It has a lot of meaning and emotion.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

OMG!!! anothyer bad day!!! really good poem... remember that i will be thinking of you!!!!! miss talking to you but still thinking of you!!
your lil sis

Posted 12 Years Ago



'The sun shines through my window, bright
Yet my souls migrane turns away'

I love that part. =]

Though you spelt migraine wrong, if you mean like a headache. =] I thought it was a great poem and you captured and tamed pain in word form. Kudos to you.

Posted 12 Years Ago


We all are always under pressure for all kind of reasons and they just never stop. We can't ignore the pain, because we still think of them...

Other than that, it's still pretty small piece, yet it means many great deal, so it's all good tho...


Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I'm so sorry about the fibromyalgia. I think your poem is nice-- although the words are a little bumpy in spots, you do an outstanding job of getting your message of pain across.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Lyndsay Castro
Lyndsay Castro

Houston, TX



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