k well not trying to be a downer but this poem was a bit grade school.
your poems dont need to rhyme to be good.
but thought that this was sweet im glad you kissed her and wrote a poem about it....
well iits nice but why not stat how you feel like maybe ecstatic ,elated or irate or even better this is a really rhymey ( rhymey is not a word haha) poem and it flows well too . But i allways suggest use your five senses when you write.I look forward to seeing more of your writing ----------PEACE
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I'm a soldier
I"m all around a little strange. I love to be unnatural i love to be abnormal. Who really wants to be normal anyway. I like all people except for criminals duh.
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