Oh Hell!

Did I say Damn, Oh Hell!

There are nights of radiant stars a million galaxies born

There are days that slip by unaccounted for they are gone

There is an unkempt boy in a tattered shirt his heart torn

There is a mother begging at your heeled feet her eyes drawn

 

There is a scramble to the pinnacle reaped sorrows won

There is the furnished and the varnished and the truth to pawn

There is the crux of life and for some it will never dawn

There is the veiled and the unveiled and religions that scorn

 

There is a Garden of Eden stolen for its ivory horn

There are the rivers and the forests and the mowed lawn

There are pretty stars that dazzle and over which we fawn

There is a Barbie doll pole dancing to the brainless brawn

 

Maybe I am a damn cynic maybe I just love to mourn

There is a grace out there and once upon a time it shone

 

Reviews

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LOL :) Oh, I didn't know you had such a dirty mouth, Moon :) Geez, that title and explanation made me laugh! Moving on......I think " A garden of Eden stolen for its ivory horn" is so meaningful in so many ways. The ivory trade being one of the worst of all time. It is a fantastic analogy for the, yes, somewhat cynical viewpoint you have constructed here, but it is also warranted. This world is filled with so much just plain awful stuff and yet there is so much beauty here as well. And that is what we turn our eyes upward for, those galaxies that still shine from once upon a time ago. It's cool, Moon. I'm a damn cynic too. Maybe just more reality based than happy endings. C'mon, with all the awful crap going on, it is enough to give anyone a raging case of divine discontent. Great work on this :)

[Pencrafter]

Your poem feels like a roller-coaster ride of images. I can't quite grasp the main message, although I enjoyed the ride.

[afra]

awesome write ...i think its your best

[Sami Khalil]

Such a nice poem with a lot of great lines.
I like the most:
There are nights of radiant stars a million galaxies born.
There is the crux of life and for some it will never dawn.
There are pretty stars that dazzle and over which we fawn...
Thank you for sharing...

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

Enjoyed this Moon especially the way you set it up being serious then in comes the barbie doll. I had to smile. Fantastic thoughts penned elegantly, love this and you Moon!