Oh Hell!

Did I say Damn, Oh Hell!

There are nights of radiant stars a million galaxies born

There are days that slip by unaccounted for they are gone

There is an unkempt boy in a tattered shirt his heart torn

There is a mother begging at your heeled feet her eyes drawn

 

There is a scramble to the pinnacle reaped sorrows won

There is the furnished and the varnished and the truth to pawn

There is the crux of life and for some it will never dawn

There is the veiled and the unveiled and religions that scorn

 

There is a Garden of Eden stolen for its ivory horn

There are the rivers and the forests and the mowed lawn

There are pretty stars that dazzle and over which we fawn

There is a Barbie doll pole dancing to the brainless brawn

 

Maybe I am a damn cynic maybe I just love to mourn

There is a grace out there and once upon a time it shone

 

Reviews

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LOL :) Oh, I didn't know you had such a dirty mouth, Moon :) Geez, that title and explanation made me laugh! Moving on......I think " A garden of Eden stolen for its ivory horn" is so meaningful in so many ways. The ivory trade being one of the worst of all time. It is a fantastic analogy for the, yes, somewhat cynical viewpoint you have constructed here, but it is also warranted. This world is filled with so much just plain awful stuff and yet there is so much beauty here as well. And that is what we turn our eyes upward for, those galaxies that still shine from once upon a time ago. It's cool, Moon. I'm a damn cynic too. Maybe just more reality based than happy endings. C'mon, with all the awful crap going on, it is enough to give anyone a raging case of divine discontent. Great work on this :)

[An owl on the moon]

There is a world out there that speaks and sings and stuns and stings... and you truly paint it in all the grit and grime that drips down the darkness... Oh it's there... I lived in Oh Hell, California for ten years (or so it was for me)!

[Dr. Wood ?]

It's easy to be cynical with the world the way it is, Great delivery here...Hell on earth.....The grace is still there but it's been imprisoned in some dark dungeon...It is only those who care that hold the key

[Violet Dreams...]

Its beautiful moon

[layla]

this is truley amazing!

[Audrey Howitt]

This is such a great and strong piece of work--well crafted and it really carries a powerful message. I just loved it!

[zainul]

I wonder how you were blessed with so many words to make the rhymed endings of single sound!
Would we call it a sonnet for its 14 lines content?
Having same sound at the endings compel me to think,it is something special which experts may resolve.
I am amazed by the beauty of the poem.

[sienikeha]

ah, from one cynic to another - it's all graceful. even the shitstorms. and the truly graceful - is made all the more so.

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

Fitting title, because sometimes it seems that is where the world is headed. Great write, vivid, honest and love the ending.

[FJ Davis]

You are quite justified in being a "damn cynic."
For much of my seventy-years, I have watched the world morally decline, precipitously.
It is my considered opinion that it will only get worse; it is getting worse, right before our eyes--unless, of course, you are among those mesmerized by "news reports" that are not news, at all. Or, the easily contented, who eat the free bread and attend the complimentary circuses, in order to be properly "diverted."
Your poem, Moon, is lovely, smartly sarcastic and noble in its plea for common decency.
Tragically, who, but the dwindling decent, will listen?

[spiritwind]

Oh, yes indeed! This is a poem. Let me rephrase that. THIS is a POEM! Absolutely fresh, original, written by someone unafraid of words. You play with images right and left and you touch your readers through their emotions. Well done.