Aisle of Sorrow

Aisle of Sorrow

A Poem by MOON

 

See all time rushing away

Grant me a second without grey

When the stars shine at night

Fool me into thinking all is right

 

Then on a bright full moon

Lance the wound

With sorrows heaped on pain

Let me hang my head in shame

 

For the bell when it pealed was for me

Life will never again be

The love filled with style

The moment we waltzed in the aisle

 

© 2012 MOON


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next time, if it has not occurred already, waltz in the sun when all things can be seen, because, as they say, things are hidden in the night....

Posted 7 Years Ago


MOON

6 Years Ago

Thanks Paul will stop by soon.
this is great moon...i like the rhymes

Posted 8 Years Ago


MOON

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much for all your lovely reviews, take care!
The love filled with style

The moment we waltzed in the aisle

a great expression :)
this is a really good peice of poetry!
well done!

Posted 8 Years Ago


MOON

8 Years Ago

Thank you do much for your review.
Take care!
There is a classic quality in your style here.
I enjoyed reading the poem aloud.
Moon, your poem can also be very good in paper.

Posted 8 Years Ago


MOON

8 Years Ago

Thanks Belle love the comments.
Take care!
The poem is sad and it is beautiful. To wish for old memories and time is the desire of the most of us. I like the ending. A nice waltzed in the aisle is always a good time. Thank you for the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

Posted 8 Years Ago


MOON

8 Years Ago

Many thanks , appreciate it.
This is very good. I like how it conveys so much in a few words..... Very good writing, I think. Thank you for sharing this.

Posted 8 Years Ago


MOON

8 Years Ago

Many thanks!
When the stars shine at night

Fool me into thinking all is right

What a beautiful expression Moon
just brilliant

Posted 8 Years Ago


the very last line 'the moment we waltzed in the aisle' i think brings a healthy, harmonious nostalgia into the forfront which for me detracted from the sorrow, due to the wonderful visual picture which came into me head.....

Posted 8 Years Ago


The sorrow builds line after line. You write with a gentle hand, as if caressing the moment and knowing it's coming to an end. Beautifully written.

Posted 8 Years Ago



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