Love

There so in love. Their perfect for each other. He treats her so well. She dreams of kissing him! Its young love =)

I love you

And you love me too

You hold me in your arms

And keep away the freezing cold

Only warming my body with yours

I love your smile

It brightens my day

I love it when you sing to me

Your voice reminds me of an angel

So beautiful and sweet

I love it when you call me

Just so you can hear my precious voice

You have told me a billion and one times

How much you love me

And what I mean to you

Im everything you ever wanted

Ive never kissed you

But I only think of what it would be like

I pictured us sitting together on the couch

You playing with my light blonde hair

And looking into each others eyes

Its then and there you would kiss me

The thought makes me so joyful

Oh how much we love each other

We are so perfect together

I couldnt have falling in love with anybody else

But you

And all always have you

To love

Author's Note

its choppy yes...doesnt rhyme and thats ok... But it mite need some work! please tell me what you think <3

Reviews

[Wolfe Greytome]

Ok, now that I have read this piece while being fully awake, I have to admit that my earlier assessment hasn't changed. This is definitely a good piece of writing - of course, I've come to expect good writing from you. This is merely another example of the quality of your writing.

Just some typos...makes me think of my bf! ah...love :)

[MAYA!!]

Just a few little typos, but other than that, it made me smile =)
I liked the sincerity that you put into it, and it was very blissful and carefree. Keep it up!

[Jason]

Beautiful flow of love....It definately touches the core of the soul. Great work...

I really like the narration in this one, the way it speaks your mind about how it feels to be in love and all that.
It doesn't have to rhyme, it flows well.

[Jess.]

Hmmm...maybe just a few little changes here and there will help it flow better...but I like it!
A great piece talking about young love! =)

[Scarlet Pulse]

Choppy is sometimes a good thing, depending on the pace and other things you want the reader to read in. You may want to try and create smoother line breaks for a warmer feeling. And try to give an image for the abstract words. It is lovely, much different from "Death" which is expected.

[Sseoni]

I really liked this! It was so passionate and beautiful! A lovely poem! :D

[deeps]

I pictured us sitting together on the couch
You playing with my light blonde hair
And looking into each others eyes
Its then and there you would kiss me

I love this part, I think it's a very hopeful and wonderful write.
Beautiful and sincere, very well written.

[Krazy On The Outside]

It is a bit choppy but it's okay.
I don't get the line before last where it says 'And all away have you" the away is what I don't get.
But it's a really good piece and I liked it! =)