I Want You, I Miss You, I Need You

I lay in bed, sick and lifeless. I havent been able to sleep let alone eat. I cant stop wishing you were here with me right now... Oh how I long for you! Please come to me and heal this illness!

As I lay in bed
...sick

I start to think of you
...I miss you

How I wish you were here
Not so you can see me in pain
But for you to keep me company

All I want is for you to lay next to me
And hold my frigid hands in yours

For you to look into my eyes
And tell me that everything will be ok

I want you to promise me you wont leave me
That you will stay here until I'm well again

But most of all...
I want you

Oh I miss you
So very much

How I long for you
To be here with me

I lay in my bed
...so very sick

Unable to stop missing you
Or even thinking of you

My body is so tired
So weak from fighting this cold

I close my eyes
And take one deep breath

I slowly fade off into a deep sleep
And I begin to dream of
....YOU

Author's Note

I dont care about flow, or even grammar. All I want him him! I need him! I miss him! I feel so crappy...and so very sick! Save me...

Reviews

[Chloe Christine]

aww, this actually made me feel your pain.
it tells exactly how you feel whenyou miss that someone.
terrible..
I love it.
85/100

[Scarlet Pulse]

This poem like all the rest is soooo emotional. And I love the way you express those crazy, sick, sad, etc. emotions. This is a great write. Good job.

[PaperHearts]

Great write! I've just recently recovered from a cold, and so I can totally relate to the feelings that you've described in your poem. I like your use of ellipses, and the shortness of the lines and stanzas. The ending was a little overdramatic for my liking, but overall, you captured the feeling well. Nice work,
~PaperHearts

[Havatara]

Jeez, I thought it wold be something like cancer instead of a cold! But it was a great poem anyway. Well done =)

[AbsentElements]

I have noticed there are many poems about the mysterious HIM and I just hope it works out for you no matter what happens. Now about the poem I have to say that it is very understandable, and very well written. Nice write.

[Jason]

quite the sad peice....but very well written. excellence pouring from your fingertips.

[deeps]

This is quite the sad write really, I can feel the feelings you have expressed. I like this, very well written.

[zack]

for someone that does not care about flow this has a great flow

[Tate Morgan]

Excellent

[A]

Urgh, I hate it when I miss people... Very nicely written, very nice indeed.