Love Or Hate?

She doesnt know whether to love or to hate. She doesnt know which it is. He makes her so happy but at the same time so angry...

I'm scared
I've never felt this way before

I dont know whether to love
Or to hate you

You make me so mad
But then you give me that pretty smile
And all the anger drifts away

When I hear your voice
My heart skips a beat

I dont know what it is
But I'm crazy for you

I'm scared
I've never felt this way before

Every time I see you
I freeze and panic

Afraid Ill make a silly mistake
Like fall and break my leg

I always know your close
Cause I can always smell you a mile away

When you get close to me
I almost faint
I cant help but to lose my breath

I'm scared
I've never felt this way before

But what is this feeling
I cant quite figure it out

I dont know if its love
Or if my mind is just playing tricks on me again

You make me so angry
And I cant help but want to hit you
But then you give me the pretty smile
And then all my anger drifts away...

I guess I hate you
But I love you too

Author's Note

I dont care about flow or grammar. But do you think this makes any sense? Is this good? I dont know... I think it needs some work. What do all of you think? If you think its needs work please dont rate but give me some advice. If you think its good the way it is then just rate or give advice or both. Im trying to raise my status! Thanks

Reviews

[PaperHearts]

Aww, I could relate to this piece a lot. I thought that this poem flowed really well, and I found that it almost read like lyrics to a song. The fact that you repeated the line 'I'm scared' emphasised the emotions expressed, making this an emotionally strong poem. The last stanza felt a little weak, in comparison to the rest of the poem, but other than that, this was a great write. Nice work,
~PaperHearts

[Chloe Christine]

Well, very good for the most part.
The flow does need a LITTLE work,
but maybe that's cause I'm used to rhyming poems. ^_^
this was very good, I totally get it.
I love it, constructive critisim. (:
88/100.

[Scarlet Pulse]

I liked this poem very much. It was full of emotional and expressed very well. It was very deep. I really enjoyed it.

[Jess.]

I can relate to this some, though I wish I didn't =/ But I like it :)

[Holly-Marie]

THis reminds me of me when I was sixteen. =)
Very emotional but well written, too.
Powerful and something most people will be able to relate to, great job =)

[deeps]

This is quite the emotional write here but so well expressed.

Wow. This is a lot like Wuthering Heights by Kate Bush...same idea, different lyrics and stuff (i like this one much better) Matters of the heart are SO complicated

[Tina Kline]

Not knowing whether to love or hate...that can cause a lot of confusion when getting to know someone you might want to like. Really enjoyed this poem too.

[rockinmiley555]

its ok. its not the worst poem i have ever read, but yes. grammer haha. i think what i like most of it is because it is so relatable.

[Havatara]

Grammar.... work on it. I'm begging you. Also, you had:
"I'm scared
I've never felt this way before"
twice, but then the third time you only put:
"I'm scared
I've never felt this way"
I don't know if you just forgot to type in the word "before" the last time, but it should stay the same throughout the poem.
I think it would also be better if you started a new stanza every time you had those two lines, since they're repeated. It would add to the overall flow of the piece. However, I still think it was well written and I enjoyed reading it.