I know she's braver than me

I know she's braver than me

A Poem by Mark D

In almost total darkness
Even the crows have gone silent
If only for a moment
As the shadow slipped away

My friend and I inch forward
Holding our breath
To hear that screaming sound
The crows go mad again

I fear a young death
Our white bodies shake
Hers in anticipation
And mine in fear

True to my nature
I could flee in panic
But why cut this moment short?
The will was ours to come

My friend more daring than I
Steps further into the dark
A tear finds my cheek
Before I retreat towards the light

The rest of her experience
Becomes a story to me
She doesn’t divide our roles in the telling of the tale
But I know she’s braver than me

© 2012 Mark D


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Apparently something sinister awaits, but what? Oh, it doesn't matter, does it? The fact remains that she craves the thrill of it much more than you. Long ago, a young lady led me through a dark, unknown woodland, and it was much as you say here. Good fun for her, goosebumps for me.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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..the crows and darkness seems so mysterious to me
...well written
=]

Posted 11 Years Ago


Lovely. I really like the expressions and word choices. Excellent poetry!

Posted 11 Years Ago


A sensative account of two close characters i feel on adventures together. That almost jealously of teh braveness but resepct nonetheless. Lovely meaningful piece of work

Posted 11 Years Ago


great write ...deep and beautiful

Posted 11 Years Ago


Like this too- a sinster poem with a kind of open end that lets the reader speculate and work on, good write.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Good write , descriptive felt the fear the scary moments .

Posted 11 Years Ago


hmmm I actually read the line, "Our white bodies shake" as "Our bodies shake white" the first time i read it... I like how that sounds, like the fear/anticipation is static falling off the body. New title perhaps? ONly because it's the last line too...

Posted 11 Years Ago


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a thriller huh?? lol love it!

Posted 11 Years Ago


Suspense, suspense….
Whatever happens next?
Love it


Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

the dark is mysterious in more then one way... very well written my friend!!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Mark D
Mark D

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