In Time

Listen closely to the silence

With mind wide open look deep

Until you can almost

Reach out and touch the sleep

There in cold still pools

Of the past

Were curses are broken

By prayers cast

Contemplating eyes stare back at me

From the reflections

And a flash of light

Brings to dead eyes sight

Together Traveling souls come

From all directions

For just a brief moment

I know joy

Like the kind that came

From behind the eyes

Of a boy

Now a man i am

Lost in the Gaze

Of my own eyes

In exchange for my youth

My heart was granted

Only truth

As i grow to be old

Complete

And wise

Reviews

[Kathryn Star, Shine!]

Complicated thought, going from child to man. Only the eyes of the beholder can see what is behind the eyes, see through the experiences, rush through time with them. Easy to relate to your poem. I like how you wrote in exact words," Of a boy
Now a man i am "

The fact that you did not write,"Now a man I am" makes the writing more clear that man and boy are the same as one.

very nice and I enjoyed your writing. I look forward to reading more. Thank you for sharing your thoughts. KS

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

A wonderful write. Thank you for sharing. Debileah

[.::Cup^E^Cake*RaWr!*::.]

This is amazing!!

[Spoken]

In exchange for my youth
My heart was granted
Only truth

I like that. a great perspective on reaching adulthood and what it means. We see things as they are, more aware to our surroundings and the way of things... bringing truth to everything.

I like the descriptions of your reflection in water starring back at you. Nicely done!

[Dani California]

This seems a bit different for you ML.. I can't put my finger on it.

Self reflection. Moving through life, messages and life gifts sent through others to lighten the darkened paths stumbled onto along the way. I like the clarity that is found here.

A pleasure to read my friend. :)

[Butterflymom]

Beautiful and well written piece. I enjoyed reading this very much. I loved the ..."in exchange for my youth
My heart was granted only truth as I grow to be old complete and wise"..........WoW, I can relate to that. Awesome write, and I'd like to read more of your writing.

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Very nice verse.

I once wrote something similar, but nowhere near as well done.

I look forward to reading more soon!