Thinking Backwards

Thinking Backwards

A Poem by Neville
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a kinda reminisce

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Thinking Backwards

 

If I die now

At least you will

Have read me

And that feels good

As good as when we

Showered

In the forest

With only a bucket

And sun warm rain

Between us

 

But weren’t those

The days

Laying leafy and curled

Mid canopy filtered

Solar rays

And shyness behind us

The kind of days

Poets crave and

Films are made of

 

Too golden for eyes

And just a splash of green

Both here and there

To finger and caress  

I used to smoke back then

Remember

But crave you now

More than I ever did

Those Marlboro’s

 

Funny isn’t it

I often think about

Our little echoes

And where all those

Smoke rings went

And do you ever wonder

What happened to our laughter

I know I very often do ……   

 

© 2019 Neville


Author's Note

Neville
dont try this at home but let me know how it feels when the dust settles........ N

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That thinking backwards lark must have Spielberg and Lucy's working overtime on editing those thoughts into a greatest hits collection. It wasn't concussion that made you forget she probably smashed you over the head with the bucket, it was CGI
Ahh, it's good to be back 😀

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

3 Years Ago

Hey Bro tis good to have thee back.. Love ya like a fat kid luv's cake.. but then ya know that dont'.. read more
Lorry

3 Years Ago

Did someone say cake?
And that meant to say Lucas, not Lucy's. 😀
Neville

3 Years Ago

Yeah fancy a picnic....
I guessed as much ... ta :)


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Another viewing of this tender hold on memories worth keeping when little things meant such a lot and you poem that time so very well here Nev. A most moving read...............x

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

2 Years Ago


I said it before and am gonna say it again, bless you my friend and truly true too .. :)
A very sensual and warming read, dear sir. You've made some golden memories to cherish. Ultimately, it's the only thing for keeps.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

2 Years Ago


I think that is my prime motivator PJ ... and I sincerely thank you my friend :)
AJNJ

2 Years Ago

Its a great pleasure always. :)
We seem to do more thinking backwards as we get older. When you are young you don't have the time. That warm rainwater sounds a delight. Sensual even. Good to read this a second time. Good morning Neville, windy woos this morning. Pegs well secured and we are staying put.

Chris

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

2 Years Ago


sounds like a good idea our Chris .. and thanks again :)
Sounds very nice.... an enjoyable read.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

2 Years Ago


I am delighted you should think so .. thank you Allie B :)
light and ashes

2 Years Ago

You're welcome
Neville

2 Years Ago


:) .
I used to think time was a thief but then I realized how many memories it's gifted me too.
Lovely to remember such moments, isn't it?

Posted 2 Years Ago


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Ana Papaya

2 Years Ago

I am. :)
Neville

2 Years Ago


... the old curmudgeon say's enjoy :)
Ana Papaya

2 Years Ago

Thank you :)
Time just tiptoes away, taking the laughter and the sun warm rain with it...

The love beneath the memory, and the wash of regret show this imagery in a kind of filtered photography mode, like Hollywood in the 70s.

Makes me wonder, and hope for you... may you rediscover the inside jokes stitched into the lining.

Great seeing you again, Nev! 😀😀

V

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

2 Years Ago


So good to have you here verse my friend.. it does seem an eternity for sure..... 😀😀read more
I think that looking back is an intrinsic part of our human condition Neville. Unfortunately we have to take the good and the bad. You've done a great poetic job here, sweet and tender with all these particular memories and then the bittersweet realisation that they are no longer together. I've found that when you reminisce with someone your recollections can be quite different.
Hope all's well with you.
Alan

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

2 Years Ago

hello Alan and thank you.. You are of course quite right regarding the sharing of recollections.. I .. read more
Such lyrical beauty contained in this poem Neville. I read and was transported to that time and place you so enchantingly describe.

And of course, in writing this, you tell us precisely where that laughter lies; which is in a never to be forgotten memory.

Beccy.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

2 Years Ago


I cannot thank you enough for visiting these words and for the uplifting comment you left be.. read more
Neville, an exceptional account of what we might see and feel sitting along a creek or on a cabin porch, eyes closed, gray hair in the wind. I like the little snapshots and flashbacks you inserted here. Regardless of where we grew up, I think this touches many, especially writers. I has a happy-sad feeling and so sincere.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

2 Years Ago


I dunno how I managed to miss your luverly message until just now R.E Ray.. but I am delight.. read more

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