The Birth of Opals

The Birth of Opals

 

Upon my very word

I did once marvel

At the seeming birth

of opals

Along the subtle curve of

Her naked back and thigh

And how within their

Fiery glow

They did so very much resemble

The cascading wave of

Salmon flank

Across my semi precious

Somerset sky

A county blessed with

What once was and what

Might once have been

Upon my very word

I came to know those skies

So well indeed

Or did I merely wish or

dream it so

For my body and my soul

All those blues greens

Reds and golds

As delicate as fern fronds

And fragile as a wren’s egg

Just as full

Yet without familial ties

It was then she

Sighed and smiled and

Brushed those tiny beads

Of sweat aside

As iridescent as

The wings of a

Hover fly and transient

She was still there

Till she was all but gone

And that is the nature of

This one word love

I have learnt to frown upon

 

Reviews

[emmajoy]

' Reds and golds - As delicate as fern fronds - And fragile as a wren’s egg - Just as full.. '

When a man compares love to such a precious yet solid stone, he's turning it into something gentle, soft and delicate that nothing.. nothing, can make it or the woman it reveals, more beautiful. Perhaps, that is how you see love in all its facets- a time consuming passion to discover but.. .. There's treasure in these words.

[Neville]

Far too generous emmajoy but a delightful find, these words, this new week dawning.... Bless you & true... N

[lightsong]

I came across this once again, the title dawned and tempted me once again... to treasure a woman like this dear Neville, only a "real" man can do, and real men aren't everywhere, nor every man is a real one, I know You understand me well enough here, and again I must applaud You high for this precious gem*

[Neville]

cor blimey my friend.. how bloomin kind of you to visit these words twice.. and ya got me blushing so much I almost spilt me cherry coke zero :)

[lightsong]

"IF" and I'm saying "IF" anyone came to tell You, that You are not so passionate, not so romantic, and You don't write them well enough, just show them THIS marvelous massive gem!!! You know what is the great about it? that it's so original written in the way only Neville can!

100 for 100 times if I could.

[Neville]

I really do feel a little bit special now.. thank you so very much for your glowing appraisal my lovely friend and poet... Neville :) x

[lightsong]

Believe ME, You deserve it ALL!

[Neville]

Thank you so much and true Light.. :)

[Cherrie Palmer]

My favorite kind of poems have their own voice.you don't have to struggle to find or hear a rhyme. Because the work itself has a natural rhythm that serenades the reader. This poem is saturated in that quality.

[Neville]

what a lovely thing to say my dear friend Cherrie.. I am absolutely thrilled... many thanks indeed and I know I've said it before but Seasons Best to You & Yours... Neville :)

[Crowley]

That is one of the best titles ever...and the poem to follow was mesmerizing, delicate and delicious. Whew, what a great write Fran!

[Neville]

I am truly honoured.. cheers mate.. Neville

[Crowley]

Not sure if you are Fran of friend now....Hmmmm. my pleasure nonetheless and wishing a good evening!!!

[Neville]

Fran of friend or friend or foe... doh :)

[Fran Marie]

Filled with vivid images within your lovely poetic verse ...love the delicate feel of serenity within the fern fronds ...beautifully expressed..nice work..

[Neville]

I am absolutely delighted you found this page.. many thank yous for stopping to consider and comment so encouragingly.... Neville

[Fran Marie]

you're quite welcome dear friend..

[Neville]

thank you again Fran... Neville

[Eilis]

Your title prepped me for an epic myth type poem. I wasn’t disappointed. I love how you’ve woven the love, the countryside, nature as origins and the sense of the beginnings of love itself into an observation on sweat beads.

I suppose the love poem should be that. I mean something that can make the reader believe that there is only one true condition, and one relationship that lives up to that standard.

I know there’s more there. The mourning of the transience of even the purest of states or feelings. More particularly the loss of someone dearly loved. But, I love the way a love has inspired something so beautiful. I particularly enjoyed the salmon imagery and the fern fronds. All very soothing.

Beautiful work, Neville.

[Neville]

Dear Eilis, I am truly grateful to you for checking in and considering these words of mine.. Peace and All Good Things this Festive Season and for the New Year.. N x

[NotUsinganymore]

Very great imagry! I liked it very much!

[Neville]

how very kind my friend.. thank you :)

[Norman 223]

Poetic perspicacity in perspiration. Glowing images, sensuous language all gone in a flash in the final dénouement.
An intriguing piece of writing, Neville. What more could we ask for on a poetry site?
Norman

[Neville]

I feel totally indulged my friend, many sincere thank you's.. take care and stay well now d'ya hear.. Neville

[Einstein Noodle]

oh my goodness ...how surprised i was in your closing ...that one line added layer upon layers to the tale .. from subtle sensuality to the skies so full of colors and imaginations ... tho your protagonist frowns it made me smile initially ...but then ....that is so sad ... such love ... yet mistrusted :( what a wonderful experience to read for me my friend! well done! i agree with Ken about the English flare to it ...nice!
E.

[Neville]

Your visit to this particular page is so very much appreciated my Friend, I can not thank you enough.... All Good Things, Neville

[Einstein Noodle]

of course Neville ... i think we have become pretty good conspirators here at the Cafe ;)

[Neville]

Absolutely..... N

[An owl on the moon]

What a powerfully moving, sensually sighing space of life. Each word arouses a place of warmth, a genuine agony of beauty and longing. Magnificent.

[Neville]

You are the most generous owl on the moon I have ever encountered my friend, many thanks indeed for the glowing sentiment you have bestowed upon these words here.... All Good Things, Neville

[An owl on the moon]

It is my honor and joy to have your words speaking into my life, dear friend.

[Neville]

sentiment well & truly reciprocated..... N